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this may seem as though it was easy- regard it as rap
;)Pia

this must have been a very frightening time Pia,
your description shows that there are people who
care about you. I hope all is well now.

Jenny. xxx

I commend you on getting through tough times Pia, and if you're still going through them, I'm sure you'll be just fine.

I've been enjoying your work recently, this is a very provocative piece though. Something which I haven't seen from you.

Just shows how talented you are.

X
Pinda

When life gets difficult and you become unhappy there is no better therapy than writing it all out. You seened to have got the hang of this most precious gift. Well done. Val

Jenny- it's not that frightening anymore- but thanks a lot for your empati
Pia ;)

Pinda- that was a lovely comment- thank you very much
thanks for reading
cheers
Pia ;)

Yes Val writing is surely the best therapy.
thanks for reading and your kind comment
;)Pia

Good work, very well written.

SundaysChild- thanks for reading and your kind comment

this poem is so simple, but it really works - it has impact. Well done. Do keep writing

This is very well written,it seems simple but heart rending and hard hitting. I hope you are ok x

This is very well written,it seems simple but heart rending and hard hitting. I hope you are ok x

Well done, you deserved a bunch of cherries for this Pia.

X
Pinda

Gee wizz, thanks cherry picking Team. I hadn't expected this at all. Really does cheer me up!
Pia ;)

Insert. Thank you very much for the comment. I will really try my hardest at writing.
;)Pia

Tinkerbell- I am quite all right all taken into consideration. Thank you very much for reading and commenting. Much appreciated.
;)Pia

Pinda I am so glad for your comments. I really do appreciate them coming from a true Rapper and expert at verse.
;)Pia

Thanks for the cherry Insert ;)

Just wanted to say congratulations on the cherries
Pia, well deserved.

Jenny.

Here’s a slogan to help pull you through: No resistance No aggression
No violence.

Whatever you do for god’s sake don’t stop the pills. The doctor is always right remember that. They have to let you go sooner or later the government needs the beds. Just keep a cool cerebellum.

Something about the way you use words so sparingly that makes this quite haunting. A real and emotional read - very well done Pia and congrats on cherries. :-)

Thanks Jenn- sweet of you
;)Pia

Thanks Nolan- no none of that- a fair enough conversation with the staff and the doctor. I left the next day and no I won't stop the little medication I have. Keeps psykoses away and apples don't really help that much in this situation. Thank you for your concern- really is very kind of you. Will be meeting a psychiatrist soon. Am trying to avoid relapses.
cheers
;)Pia

Thanks fatboy- much appreciated- you have quite a way with words yourself ;)
Pia

Apologies Pia. Admittedly, I’m a bit disappointed. I was hoping you'd liven up the place around here.

Keep well take it easy! Nolan

Pia - there is nothing more for me to add, except to say I admire your courage. You write from the heart. A rare talent indeed.

Tina;-)

No drama Nolan eh?
;)Pia cheers

Hi Tina- I was just wondering if it was all a bit much writing so honestly- I will keep wondering and writing ;)
Pia

This is a more then a well-earned Cherry, very honest. I love how each stanza flows into the next and the detached feeling of the speaker. Very moving!

Thanks a lot Blighters ;)
Pia

Maggy I greatly appreciate your comment. Thank you
;)Pia

Its lovely Pia, great rythem and personally I find a
very reassuring mood weaved into the words somehow K

Yes you got it right Kahdai- I am more confident of my healing process- thanks a lot really do appreciate your opinion.
;)Pia

Thank you for that is good mood news! ;) x K

What pills are they giving you?

Kahdai- thanks for sticking with me
;)Pia

Nolan- they are anti-psychotic tranquilisers if you must know
;)Pia

I don't know what else I can add, everything's been said. A well deserved cherry. I hope your well.

Beeme xx

I'm doing quite all right thanks Beeme. Managing very well despite whatever seems to be wrong with me
;)Pia

I thought it was a very vivid snapshot, a short story in poem form, although the language wasn't as complicated as in some of your other poems. I really could visualize the place.

I also liked the way you list objects and things you see; like your summing up the night and it conveys a sense of how empty the night is, perhaps.

Last night
Magazines with celebrity gossip.
last years .
Half finished crossword puzzles, Sudoku,
a broken biro,
Linoleum floors
nondescript pieces of lithography on the walls,
a tray with a thermos of coffee and no cups,
2 empty tables with chairs around.
An office with window panes

I also like the line

"Space between thoughts"

both because it mirrors the form of the poem on the page (the spaces between stanzas) and because it seems to represent the relationship between your surroundings and your thoughts or perhaps, the relationship between internal and external emptiness.

I may be reading too much into it or perhaps misinterpreting it but I do think its a good poem;
a slice of life.

Well-wisher,
I think it is a good thing that you can analyse a poem so well. Thank you for excerting yourself in my case. I'm glad I got through to you as well
;)Pia