Inequity

By Highhat

Fri, 18 Mar 2011
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6 comments
 

They all took a bite of your neck
Leaving you in psychopathological limbo
Waiting for the social sciences
To take a grip of the diagnosis
If you want to stay sane
Then leave nothing to termination
manic depression
Losing your teeth
your family bonds
Eventually
Do you feel like committing suicide?
I wouldn’t tell you if I did
Would I?
Are you considering it
Leave me alone
But you need something
Attention
But the source is not
Sufficient
Slowing down
Finally
At ease
With the awareness
You bore yourself
At a certain pace
Needing space
Solitude
Substance
Tenacity
Inequity of the struggle
Who are you?
Do you understand?
Why do you forget?
Because
You remember too much

Certificate U
Autobiography

Comments

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Pia, there seems to be a power struggle going on in this piece, it almost felt like you were having a conversation with either your conscious or a doctor, am I right? This is very well thought out, I think this piece really comes from the heart, and I admire you for being able to write down your feelings in this way. Jenny.

 

Submitted by shoe on
The first line drew me right in, thought provoking and gripping and as Jenny says, reads like a power struggle. nice one.

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
An interesting poem, Pia, most certainly;-) Tina

 

Submitted by seashore on
Yes I agree with the others. It's a kind of `stream of consciousness' but I like that. In fact I like it a lot.

Submitted by celticman on
It's got some kind of weird dual dialogue, but is seems to work.

 

Submitted by Highhat on
Thank you all- yes a bit schizo- that's my diagnosis anyway- but Thank you all for reading and coming with some nice comments ;)Pia