navel-gazing

By Highhat

Tue, 23 Aug 2011
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22 comments
 

I’m taking 10 minutes off
from heaven and hell and the
perpetual stains of mankind
to watch, gaze, stare
at the silver -glistening path of this garden
slug
trailing its memories behind
in search of blackberry leaves
A new future
leaving war and tears for us humans
to realize we don’t need
to feed off
only 10 minutes
to let the sun reflect in the silvery slime
thoughts gazing at a pace
a child would not wonder about
or even doubt
for 10 minutes all animosity
is pacified
all love sacrificed
suspended in a void
heaven and hell are
dubious entities
Nought exists
but the sparkling tracks
between goldenrod and blackberry bush

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Comments

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Sent shivers down the back of my neck, Pia...in the nicest possible way. Wonderful this, and those last three lines - icing on the cake;-) Tina

 

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
A beautiful nature study, Pia. I think we should all take ten minutes like this from time to time! Magic xxx

 

Submitted by ScoZen on
Hej Highhat "...for 10 minutes all animosity is pacified..." I hope for much longer.
ScoZen

Submitted by Highhat on
Tina glad you enjoyed this one ;)Pia

Submitted by Highhat on
Thanks Magic ;)Pia

Submitted by Highhat on
Well Scozen- I hope for more too but....somewhere in the world... we just never get respite thanks ;)Pia

Submitted by maggyvaneijk on
An excellent piece, blueberries & blackberries let's make a poetic pie!

 

Submitted by shoe on
I wanted to choose a favourite bit, but it all intertwines so tightly, I couldn't, maybe, just maybe those last 5 lines? heck! it's all wonderful,:}

 

Submitted by Highhat on
Yeah let's do that Maggy- good idea ;)Pia

Submitted by Highhat on
What a lovely comment Shoe. Thank you very much- really made my day... ;)Pia

Submitted by celticman on
Taking the time to appreciate a poem well penned. Well done.

 

Submitted by Highhat on
It's so good to take one's time Celtic and thank you for reading and your appreciative comment. Really makes me smile. ;)Pia

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
I love all the descriptions in this piece Pia, but like shoe, couldn't really pick out a favourite bit, the piece as a whole is brilliant. Jenny.

 

Submitted by Highhat on
Gee thanks a lot Jenny-brilliant is a lovely word. Always glad you have enjoyed. ;)Pia

Submitted by hudsonmoon on
Very tasty, Pia. Especially loved the opening. Rich

 

Submitted by Highhat on
Rich.. and that was a tasty comment- thank you very much ;)Pia

Submitted by Overthetop1 on
Take 10 minutes out to consider that you have a wonderfully unique, poetic voice.

Overthetop1

Submitted by Highhat on
That is a very nice thing to say about my poem OTT. I can live off that all day now.Thank you heaps...;D ;)Pia

Submitted by lenchenelf on
Lovely, this is what makes a memorable poem, capture an image, defined it as its own :-) all the best Lena xx

 

Submitted by Highhat on
Thanks Lena- ;)Pia

Submitted by cormacru999 on
Very nice. I could really picture that moment in all its simple glory.

Nicholas Schoonbeck

Submitted by Highhat on
I enjoyed writing this C999- thanks for reading and your comment. Glad you enjoyed. ;)Pia