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Posted by Highhat on August 23, 2011 - 03:27

I’m taking 10 minutes off
from heaven and hell and the
perpetual stains of mankind
to watch, gaze, stare
at the silver -glistening path of this garden
slug
trailing its memories behind
in search of blackberry leaves
A new future
leaving war and tears for us humans
to realize we don’t need
to feed off
only 10 minutes
to let the sun reflect in the silvery slime
thoughts gazing at a pace
a child would not wonder about
or even doubt
for 10 minutes all animosity
is pacified
all love sacrificed
suspended in a void
heaven and hell are
dubious entities
Nought exists
but the sparkling tracks
between goldenrod and blackberry bush

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Comments

Silver Spun Sand | August 23, 2011 - 08:04

Sent shivers down the back of my neck, Pia...in the nicest possible way. Wonderful this, and those last three lines - icing on the cake;-)

Tina

MistakenMagic | August 23, 2011 - 12:43

A beautiful nature study, Pia. I think we should all take ten minutes like this from time to time!

Magic xxx

ScoZen | August 23, 2011 - 15:29

Hej Highhat

"...for 10 minutes all animosity is pacified..."

I hope for much longer.

Highhat | August 23, 2011 - 15:53

Tina glad you enjoyed this one

;)Pia

Highhat | August 23, 2011 - 15:54

Thanks Magic

;)Pia

Highhat | August 23, 2011 - 15:56

Well Scozen- I hope for more too but....somewhere in the world... we just never get respite
thanks
;)Pia

maggyvaneijk | August 23, 2011 - 16:54

An excellent piece, blueberries & blackberries let's make a poetic pie!

shoe | August 23, 2011 - 17:39

I wanted to choose a favourite bit, but it all intertwines so tightly, I couldn't, maybe, just maybe those last 5 lines? heck! it's all wonderful,:}

Highhat | August 23, 2011 - 17:47

Yeah let's do that Maggy- good idea

;)Pia

Highhat | August 23, 2011 - 17:48

What a lovely comment Shoe. Thank you very much- really made my day...

;)Pia

celticman | August 23, 2011 - 19:37

Taking the time to appreciate a poem well penned. Well done.

Highhat | August 24, 2011 - 04:34

It's so good to take one's time Celtic and thank you for reading and your appreciative comment. Really makes me smile.

;)Pia

skinner_jennifer | August 24, 2011 - 14:21

I love all the descriptions in this piece Pia, but
like shoe, couldn't really pick out a favourite bit,
the piece as a whole is brilliant.

Jenny.

Highhat | August 24, 2011 - 18:43

Gee thanks a lot Jenny-brilliant is a lovely word. Always glad you have enjoyed.

;)Pia

hudsonmoon | August 25, 2011 - 18:23

Very tasty, Pia. Especially loved the opening.

Rich

Highhat | August 25, 2011 - 19:25

Rich.. and that was a tasty comment- thank you very much

;)Pia

Overthetop1 | September 4, 2011 - 02:43

Take 10 minutes out to consider that you have a wonderfully unique, poetic voice.

Highhat | September 4, 2011 - 04:53

That is a very nice thing to say about my poem OTT. I can live off that all day now.Thank you heaps...;D
;)Pia

lenchenelf | September 5, 2011 - 09:41

Lovely, this is what makes a memorable poem, capture an image, defined it as its own :-)
all the best
Lena xx

Highhat | September 5, 2011 - 18:44

Thanks Lena-

;)Pia

cormacru999 | September 12, 2011 - 20:39

Very nice. I could really picture that moment in all its simple glory.

Highhat | September 13, 2011 - 04:58

I enjoyed writing this C999- thanks for reading and your comment. Glad you enjoyed.

;)Pia