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Posted by Highhat on April 26, 2011 - 17:51

Perspectives
Windows at angles
Doors slamming
Keys jangling
Unlocked birdsong
No wind
Pebbles and dandelions
Suicide safe
Speech is a murmur
Words of strength
Wedged between fading posters and
Affirmation
Looking deep into a pit of dreams
Ants spitting on the lavender
Falling in and out of love

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Comments

Silver Spun Sand | April 26, 2011 - 18:02

An extremely evocative poem, Pia. The structure you have chosen suits it well. Well written and highly effective...the last three lines particularly, a gem;-)

Tina

beaste | April 26, 2011 - 18:08

I like it. Short and simple

Highhat | April 26, 2011 - 18:20

Thanks a lot Tina- glad you enjoyed- your words mean a lot to me
;)Pia

Highhat | April 26, 2011 - 18:20

Thanks Beaste- very kind of you
;)Pia

insertponceyfre... | April 26, 2011 - 19:44

I like it too Pia. Quite a lot to read between the lines in this one

Highhat | April 26, 2011 - 19:52

Yea Insert- you are quite right. Thank you for your kind comment
;)Pia

Mummy Penguin | April 26, 2011 - 19:54

There's an intensity to this work that is increased by its brevity and imagery.

Really enjoyed reading it.
MP

maisie | April 26, 2011 - 20:07

"Keys jangling
Unlocked birdsong
No wind
Pebbles and dandelions"

my favourite bit...
thanks.

Highhat | April 27, 2011 - 07:06

gee thanks MP and maisie- so kind of you to read and leave a comment. Glad you enjoyed
;)Pia

seashore | April 28, 2011 - 13:26

Another fan of this poem adding my bit, Pia. Really liked it.

Highhat | April 28, 2011 - 14:16

I appreciate exactly you commenting Coral- thank you very much
;)Pia

skinner_jennifer | May 2, 2011 - 12:19

A truely imaginative poem from you Pia.

Jenny.

Highhat | May 2, 2011 - 17:21

Thanks Jenn. Nice to have you back
;)Pia