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A sick mind

Posted by Highhat on April 9, 2011 - 14:13

I’d like to be different
But I can’t
Because I live in a straight- jacket
Preventing me from displaying
Who I want to be
I have a very fine idea
of how I wish to live my life
But I can’t
You say then shelve it
But I can’t
That would be dangerous
There are some joys
Though they are tuned at
A low level
there is a limit to tolerance
To all opportunities
To brainpower
To sanity
To my physical expression
To my social capacities
There are so many limits
Not many green lights
Only red.
I’d like to be the somebody I often
Wish I was
But I can’t
someone slammed on the brakes
they're jammed

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Comments

Richard L. Prov... | April 9, 2011 - 14:49

Hey, this is really neat. A journey out of control, with a sudden halting at the end, and relief. Richard LP

Highhat | April 9, 2011 - 15:21

I'm glad you felt relieved Richard. Way to go
;)Pia

Silver Spun Sand | April 9, 2011 - 15:33

Many will identify with your poem, Pia, and the feelings which the narrator touches upon. The imagery of the journey works very effectively.

Tina;-)

seashore | April 9, 2011 - 15:40

Yes, I understand this - well put, Pia.

Beeme | April 9, 2011 - 16:00

I can relate too, very much. A great message very well expressed :) x

Highhat | April 9, 2011 - 17:16

I'm thinking of taking this off as I think it is a bit too confessional but then you all seem to be able to relate to it so I must have hit a general feeling. Maybe I should let it be?
thank you very much for commenting
I'm a bit down today. Maybe it will be better tomorrow or later
;)Pia

seashore | April 9, 2011 - 17:20

Please don't take it off, Pia - also have a down day so am thankful for something I can relate to!

Coral x

Highhat | April 9, 2011 - 18:14

okay I won't Coral thanks for getting back to me
I'll try to think of something cheerful to write about

atb
;)Pia

insertponceyfre... | April 9, 2011 - 21:02

I don't think you should take it down either Pia -it's a good poem. I hope you feel better tomorrow

Highhat | April 10, 2011 - 07:42

Thanks you very much Insert. Also for the good wishes.
;)Pia

seashore | April 10, 2011 - 08:24

I wouldn't worry about finding something cheerful to write abot either Pia - write what you feel. I't's all about quality and this is a very good poem as Insert says.

Coral x

Highhat | April 10, 2011 - 09:16

You are too kind Coral- you can't always change your mood by writing but just finding the words gives immense satisfaction equalled the comments you get on a piece here.
;)Pia

skinner_jennifer | April 10, 2011 - 14:22

Hi Pia,

I feel exactly the same way Tina does about your
poem, you have touched upon feelings that are very
human in all of us.

So I agree don't take it off and I really hope the
sun is shining for you better today.

Take care of yourself.

Jenny.

Highhat | April 10, 2011 - 17:05

Thanks Jenny ;) times can be rough but you light up the day for me with your comment
;)Pia

ScoZen | April 11, 2011 - 19:12

Hej little Highhat.

"...Not many green lights Only red..."

Don't forget...there are colours in-between?

godnat.

Highhat | April 11, 2011 - 19:18

Tak ScoZen- 1000 tusind Tak
sov godt
;)Pia

beaste | April 26, 2011 - 18:24

I love the ending, it changes the whole poem. In a good way

Highhat | April 26, 2011 - 19:50

So glad you read this one of mine Beaste- thank you for your kind comment
;)Pia

seekerofwords | May 22, 2011 - 23:55

the journey your words took me on were of great benefit! I really enjoyed this fine piece of writing!

Namaste,

Lenny

Highhat | May 23, 2011 - 06:26

I'm so glad you enjoyed Lenny- thanks for telling me

;)Pia