Surfer

Highhat, I love the way you express yourself, it's almost as if you have actually experienced riding a wave. Jenny.

Yes. I feel the wave.

Highhat, I was about to send you a message thanking you for noticing my essay on innovation, when I saw this poem. All I can say is that's just fantastic, and I'm not easily impressed. I never lived near the ocean, but I'd visit it sometimes and see the surfers... and I wanted to learn. But it just never happened. And now I'm not as prone to try difficult new things: having a lot of difficult old things I can always return to. And, more crucially, I've become far too happy and successful to take the risks I used to. Back to the poem, I won't micro-analyze but I'll comment a little Your repetition of "as I pass through the pipeline" fits the poem perfectly. It takes guts to use that much repetition, and poetic savvy to know when it will work. I love the subject specific details. Many people can relate to a just slightly dangerous, thrilling activity where much of the joy comes from precision and confidence. You vividly paint a physical picture for the reader: complete with gravity, surfboard, and that swelling wave. In my opinion, this is a mini-masterpiece.

wooh always hope to surf properly, never manage yet keep trying! sound exciting, reading this makes it seem like a rush for thrill seekers! K

Its almost like song lyrics; someone should pout it to music. Another brilliant piece ;)

Really intricate and visual descriptions here, Pia. Well done! Magic xxx

nice piece here Pia. Its gives a real sense of the presence of the wave.

Told you you had something here, Highhat. You helped inspire my "Ode to Tennis," one of the best poems I've ever written. Poetry should be about anything interesting, not just elevated or traditional subjects.

I like the repetition. It reminds me of a meditation or a mantra. I also think that the poem succeeds in creating a sense of time slowing down or standing still or being 'captured'.