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Today is Now part 2

Posted by Highhat on January 13, 2011 - 20:50

Paralysed by the desolation,
the destruction and counting
the dead.
Old age is okay but leaving
life before you turn fourty
is not all right.
It’s too early.
Nevertheless
I count the dead from
my past.
That makes my shoulders
flinch not shrug.
Destroying the days.
Ruining every day.
Sitting on cold
concrete pavements.
Turning warmth
to freezing indifference.
Shouting at passers by
in drunken disorder.
Knives and fists,
beer bottles and crutches
of despair.
Inhaling the smoke of
intoxicating drugs.
Indolence reigns.
Kissing dirt.
Forgetting the child
in yourself.
Harsh was the life.
I lay it aside and say:
“That was the past!”
Today is now and forever.

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Comments

SundaysChild | January 13, 2011 - 22:03

Punchy and good.

Silver Spun Sand | January 13, 2011 - 22:11

Couldn't agree more with SundaysChild. Smashing;-)

Tina

well-wisher | January 13, 2011 - 22:25

I like this. If I may be honest, I prefer this part to part one. They should probably cherry pick this one aswell.

I like this better because its full of images and it has a jagged, jarring rhythm which is well suited to its harsh, gritty subject matter. The rhythm sort of reminds me of a Kurt Cobain song.

I hope the future holds happy things for you.

Highhat | January 13, 2011 - 22:33

Thanks SundaysChild
;)Pia

Highhat | January 13, 2011 - 22:35

Thank you Tina for commenting. Smashing is very appropriate- a rather smashed up life I have led.
;)Pia

Highhat | January 13, 2011 - 22:38

Thank you for a very kind comment. Yeah why did he have to take his own life- a bit of a genius if you ask me. Thank you for cherry picking me Well-wisher- that was very kind of you ;) I am on the way to a good future thank you very much for the wish.
;)Pia

skinner_jennifer | January 14, 2011 - 10:06

Hi Pia,

I am so glad you have left all the bad of the streets
behind, you certainly gave it your all, in this
piece. Now you are safe, it's only by going through
those experiences, that we can appreciate what we
have now, you have such a bright and rosy future,
hope you keep well.

Thankyou for sharing your work, it's always a
pleasure to read.

Jenny.

seashore | January 14, 2011 - 10:34

Stark, real and great.

Highhat | January 14, 2011 - 11:40

Yes Jenny- I really do appreciate what I have now and it is only looking back that makes me love the now so much but I can lay it aside now happily and that is a great step forward.
Thank you for your kind comment and for taking the time to read. I'm so glad we support each other. Is a joy !!
;)Pia

Highhat | January 14, 2011 - 11:41

Thank you Seashore for reading and commenting
;)Pia

insertponceyfre... | January 14, 2011 - 19:07

shouting at passers by - passers doesn't need an apostrophe

I agree with the others Pia - very good!

Highhat | January 15, 2011 - 08:41

I shall correct it Insert- thank you for the comment
and the cherry ABCtales.
;)Pia