Sun of the primaeval morning;
-Illuminator of dreams;
- -Perceiver of the Truth;
- - -Entheal Thinker;
- - - -The Flame within;
- - - - -Pristine Star;
- - - - - -Secret
- - - - - - Hope.
*
Lighter of the dark corners;
-Primogenitor of Thought
- -Before the birth of Time.
- - -Divinely inspired
- - - -Enlightenment:
- - - - -Immortal
- - - - - -Life-spark -
- - - - - - -Soul.
*
Knower of the Thing in Itself;
-Fire of the Violet Ray;
- -The Eye of Consciousness;
- - -Seeker of the Dawn;
- - - -Inspiration,
- - - - -Savitri -
- - - - - -Unseen
- - - - - - -Light!
Comments
Denzella | February 6, 2012 - 20:41
Hello Indrani,
This is an interesting and clever form for your poem. May I ask what your intention was by choosing this form? The shape of each stanza is so consistent
The fourth line of the first stanza I keep wanting to read "Ethereal Thinker"
Please also excuse my ignorance but what is Savitri?
I think I have just seen "Inspiration"
Moya
celticman | February 7, 2012 - 11:00
I like the form your poem takes.
skinner_jennifer | February 7, 2012 - 20:28
This is so original and beautiful.
Really enjoyed Indrani.
Jenny.
Indrani Ananda | February 7, 2012 - 23:07
Indrani Ananda
The form of inverted pyramids was 'just the way it turned out in the end', but the idea was to start each verse with a theme and condense it on each progressive line until a single word is left to convey the pure form of Savitri. The fourth line of the first stanza is the word Entheal - it means 'Divinely Inspired', as Savitri is Sanskrit for Inspiration.
Thank you for your appreciation.
Indrani.
Denzella | February 8, 2012 - 06:18
Hello Indrani,
I had a moment of inspiration yesterday when it suddenly hit me that the stanzas were upside down pyramid shapes. Thank you for explaining Entheal and also Savitri. I hate not understanding things and now you tell me the reason for the shape I can see you were right with your title and with your use of 'entheal'. The work is divinely inspired. I loved it before but even more so now.
MOya
Indrani Ananda | February 12, 2012 - 18:23
Indrani Ananda
Thank you Moya. I often try to experiment with word patterns, but problems soon occur when done on computers. I've not mastered this 'cut & paste' stuff yet.
Indrani.