Autumnal Eyes

Cherry

By JoseHdz

Thu, 11 Aug 2011
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19 comments
 

It is not that
I no longer
Yearn for your
Sunlit kiss

On the coolness
Of my upper cheek

It is just that
I have come
To know

The obscurity of oceans

It is not that
I no longer
Ache for
Your voice

In the middle
Of the cubist night

It is just that
I have come
To find comfort in

The frankness of silence

It is not that
I no longer
Miss you

And your
Autumnal eyes

It is just that
I have come
To accept
The fact

That leaves
Fade and fall

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Comments

Submitted by RachelPatricia on
Just stunning, Jose! Don't think it needs those final two lines, though - I think just 'that leaves fade and fall' is a beautiful ending. I especially love 'cubist night' and 'autumnal eyes' is a haunting image indeed and a fantastic title, this is really brilliant I absolutely love it :) Rachel xx

Submitted by JoseHdz on
i had doubts about the last two lines as well.. i was asking my friend for a second opinion... i will change it back and take out final two lines.. glad you liked it.. thanks for the cherries, ABCT

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Brilliant read and well deserved of the cherries. Jenny.

 

Submitted by JoseHdz on
thanks, jenny.. happy that you liked this one :) cheers, jose hernandez diaz.

Submitted by Highhat on
I liked it too. The ending was perfect. Didn't see the first one but this works really well. Yes a gem of a poem Jose. I like the images Rachel pointed out and the very personal "kiss on the upper cheek" ;)Pia

Submitted by L G Meadows on
People change, eh? Enjoyed the read.

 

Submitted by JoseHdz on
thank you, pia & LG Meadows ~! glad the poem went over well :) cheers, jose hernandez diaz.

Submitted by maggyvaneijk on
"the frankness of silence" beautiful...the whole thing, it's just beautiful.

 

Submitted by the unfolding head on
"It is not that I no longer Yearn for your Sunlit kiss On the coolness Of my upper cheek" i'm doing a clappy hand thing at this... :) really like the poem

ddf

Submitted by ScoZen on
Hola, un buen. "...The obscurity of oceans..." Lo cierto que es. (I think)? ps Well done on the cherry
ScoZen

Submitted by barryj1 on
I was looking around for the two lines that were supposed to be unnecesary and couldn't find them only to realize you had already edited them out. Nice poem! Very thought provoking!

barryj1

Submitted by seashore on
Another little beauty.

Submitted by JoseHdz on
thank you, maggy. i am glad you liked those lines. the poem was originally giong to balled, 'the frankness of silence.' .. then i went w/autumnal... thanks again, jose hernandez diaz.

Submitted by JoseHdz on
lol @ 'clappy hand thing'... very pleased you enjoyed this piece, unfolding head :) cheers, jose hernandez diaz.

Submitted by JoseHdz on
lol @ 'clappy hand thing'... very pleased you enjoyed this piece, unfolding head :) cheers, jose hernandez diaz.

Submitted by JoseHdz on
gracias, scozen.. :) happy que te gusto.. saludos, jose hernandez diaz.

Submitted by JoseHdz on
thanks, Barry~! the last two lines that were edited out were: 'that's life; that's life.' thanks again, cheers, jose hernandez diaz.

Submitted by JoseHdz on
thanks, Barry~! the last two lines that were edited out were: 'that's life; that's life.' thanks again, cheers, jose hernandez diaz.

Submitted by JoseHdz on
kind of you to say, seashore.. :) cheers, jose hernandez diaz.