So what if it kills you?

By ju B

Wed, 15 Feb 2012
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America, please
let your paper-heart bleed
for the poor.

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Submitted by scratch on
I read this earlier. Was affected by it ju B. My initial thought was 'too short', but there is something about it that drew me back. That is always something that should ring the 'quality' alarm bell. 10 words provoking a thought.... Well done.

 

Submitted by ju B on
it's not what i wanted to write really. but the meaning's there, so it'll do. thank you scratch & Stan :)

Submitted by scratch on
Ju Be. Sorry if it was lost in the translation, when I said quality alarm bell I meant to say high quality alarm bell. I liked it. :-)

 

Submitted by ju B on
OK scratch- it read right, i took it as a compliment, thank you. but I'M disappointed with it. someone once described me as a "punch-in-the-stomach" writer. & that's what i want to do with the America thing, but it won't go right. i just got to find me an angle, i know. it's just so frustrating.

Submitted by scratch on
It's not my thing but have a look at delapruch's stuff you might find a kindred spirit?