On All-beloved-returns-night

This is beautiful, Kahdai. May I just make a small suggestion as to you punctuation and line endings in the first three lines, which I feel would add greater weight to your words. I.e.:-

'Smoke - curlike;
the country road leads
the distant scent to me...'

The following lines are my favourites:-

'Flame calls to souls
lit in memory
of the one
the tears of wax mourn for."

Much enjoyed;-)

Tina xx

Thankyou Tina, I do see what you mean, would fit better with the rythem too. I just had to squash it in with drawings, so I think I will change it here. I'm glad you like it, I was more unsure about the ending, any advice or ideas? Kahdai xx

I also notice I missed the . after for thanks to you :)

It is just perfect now, Kahdai and I guessed you would notice the . for yourself. Well spotted, as they say;-)

And well done on a lovely poem.

Tina xx

Thankyou very much Tina xx