A TEAR

Wow, you wanted to break the mould, you certainly did that! this is so heartrending and beautifully written, I'm saddened that it's partly autobiographical but also elated that you have put into such eloquent words, you certainly touched one heart today.

:~}xxx

Thanks for your lovely comments Shirley, I'm pleased you liked it. Thank you also for your kind thought.

David xx :--)

This is a magnificent poem kheldar :) Touched my heart too x Absolutely wonderful poetry :)

Thank you Firebird, I so glad you liked it :--)

Yes - very effective. Definitely a path worth following on this one.

Thanks Julie, thanks rj, your comments are always welomed and always appreciated :--)

'Like him it is fleeting, fragile
Easy to wipe away
Easy to forget
Easy to believe it was never there.'

- these lines are so beautiful, David! I really hope you experiment with free verse more often if this is the result ;) And those last two lines just say it all and much more - well done!

Magic xxx

Thanks Rebecca, praise from a poet with as many reads and as many cherries as you is overwhelming.

Thank you xx :--)

Lovely imagery, but sporadic punctuation interrupts the flow in places.

J x

Hi Jennifer,

thanks for your comments, I don't usually write in this style so for future reference I would be pleased if you'd give me a few pointers punctuation wise.

kind regards,

Kheldar :--)

new kheldar
Yes. I agree to could feel the emotion.
They say men never cry who-ever,good for them.
Releases pressure.I know Iv'e had boxes tissues
But to much punctuation,ties me up in knots inside.
But back again now? If it is put more plainly,like
Editor t.cook here kindly did just bit here and there.Be easier me to grasp.But Apostrophe's=done
me in.Stating that equal=that girl girl's, of schools,what is hers is girl's and boys =boy's too much for me.
julie (:-

Beautiful work. It has great depth and sensitivity.

Thank you so much Nolan, that means a lot

Kheldar :--)

Greetings David!

I found this piece particularly moving, I think it has a real honesty to it. The subject is familiar to me and your words really resonate.

....with my best wishes

Thank you Paul, both for reading and for commenting. The autobiographical stuff in the "The Inner Condition" are all written from the heart and it is comforting that people like yourself can enjoy them and maybe draw something from them.

David

I like real emotion poems best, this is really hit my heart one, I also think you need a hug, , thanks for writing, Kahdai

Thanks kahdai, all hugs greatfully accepted!!

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