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THOUGHTS ON DYING

Posted by kheldar on November 25, 2010 - 15:09
from the ABC set THE HUMAN CONDITION

It seems my time has almost come
That time which men fear most,
When true to their mortality
They join with Death's great host.
Yet though most men fear it
Death fills me not with dread,
Its with a kind of willingness
I wait to meet the dead.

My grip on life is slipping
Each day brings greater pain,
The agony within my head
Is driving me insane.
Upon my sea of suffering
There is no sight of land,
I wait upon Death's croupier
To deal my losing hand.

When at last death takes me
What then will be my fate,
Where then will that path lead me
Hell's door or heaven's gate?
A question shortly answered
Death's shadow by my bed,
His hand is stretched towards me
He wants me with the dead.

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Comments

SundaysChild | November 25, 2010 - 15:23

Compelling stuff. Neatly done.

kheldar | November 25, 2010 - 15:31

Thank you again SundaysChild. I wrote this over 20 years ago and its down to Danrama that I've finally put it out there (so to speak).

Thanks again for reading and for commenting.

:--)

P.S. after said 20 years I restructured the last four lines (same thing said, just said differently) - funny how things work out.

SundaysChild | November 25, 2010 - 15:43

Yes- I read the posts in the forum- I think it's good that you have put these pieces out there.

I think that it's important to be free and just write away.
A while ago on here I wrote:

http://www.abctales.com/story/sundayschild/lolita

which is inspired by Vladimir Nabokov's 'Lolita'- a controversial book if there ever was one. I was aware that the subject matter could offend, but I wanted to write it so I did.

Keep up the good work.

danrama | November 25, 2010 - 16:45

I have to say how proud I am you have shared both these wonderful works. If I have in any way influenced you posting these then that's truly remarkable. This is a great poem. I find if I sit there and wonder if its appropriate to post... it ends up being a heavily commented upon hit! popular writing and controversy go hand in hand sometimes in seems

Well done Kheldar, chilling and an enticingly macabre piece. Ah the esoteric nature of the afterlife...

Dan

Kahdai | November 25, 2010 - 16:53

Hi kheldar this is really good, I think depending on the pain and the worth of life left to others, it could be a happy ending :J K xxx

kheldar | November 25, 2010 - 16:55

Thank you Dan for both the prompt to publish and for your comments. The Cherry Gods have smiled upon "Seven Ages.." which kind of proves the point of what has emerged from your forum post.

Thanks again,

David :--)

danrama | November 25, 2010 - 16:57

Ha! a well earned cherry! very welcome

Dan

Highhat | November 25, 2010 - 18:16

The rhyme and rythmn flow very well in this piece. Well done and congratulations for overruling your self-censorship.
;)Pia

kheldar | November 25, 2010 - 18:51

thank you Pia, for reading and for your comments

:--)