On reflection, in depth deep as the ocean
I wonder worry at the evil of myself within
egoccentric obnoxious omnipotent
immortal I am I feel you know.
But there must be an end
to this existence, will it be smooth
painful, will I fight not wanting
to relenquish or let go?
I am stuck at this point wondering
which way right left up down
to cast off my own selfishness
or trudge on never being who I am.
Will I ever be strong enough
to be honest and true to beliefs
I know lay written on a heart
that is scared to be courageous.
When I succeed in this
I will have found happiness
acknowledging finding revealing
someone who has been hiding.
There are shadows, cupboard doors
safety in concealed places
throw open the doors let me
sing, let me see your light.
Let me race, run to the finish line
confident that I tried wholly
as a baby cries without regard
let me live,show me the right path.
Comments
Highhat | October 22, 2010 - 20:42
Even though there is a sombre attitude here, there is also a lot of potent energy with a lot of awareness and self-consciousness which shows that the subject is on the right path. Just my humble opinion.
;)Pia
fatboy74 | October 22, 2010 - 22:46
Love those last two stanzas, powerful poem but finishes on a real sense of hope (I think). Well done Louise:-)
Louise178 | October 23, 2010 - 08:25
Thank you fatboy and Highhat, I was just really having a think about death as we all do from time to time and having a little introspective look at myself, probably a bit boring to everyone else, I do apologise, but some of the poem is about not being scared to show the whole of yourself to the world, so here is my introspective poem! :)
Highhat | October 24, 2010 - 18:06
I think you're allowed to reflect on life and death and to be introspective. That is a good way to get to know others as well, by looking at yourself and trying not to be scared of showing who you are. It is an insight a lot of people could make use of instead of having a front or a mask.I think your poem shows us that we have many facets in our personality but we don't have to take them so seriously that we are engulfed by the negative traits because we all have them. Is this jabberwocky to you?
;)Pia
Highhat | October 24, 2010 - 18:08
Then there is this google add-' why God allows pain'- My god- sorry
Louise178 | October 24, 2010 - 19:00
No it's not jabberwocky :)