I walked into a warzone
unkown
it was dark, I was totally
alone
couldn't see, couldn't speak
a terrible fear, it took
hold
a novice to these weapons
I was useless, pathetic, I was
dumb
objective, knowledgeable, patient
no
I was hysterical, frightened
yes
I walked into a warzone and
ran
back to the daylight and
sun.
Comments
maggyvaneijk | November 22, 2010 - 19:41
powerful, I like the sparse form and how nothing in this is superfluous.
SundaysChild | November 22, 2010 - 19:44
Agree
Louise178 | November 23, 2010 - 09:07
Thank you Maggy and SundaysChild, it's written from personal experience.
fatboy74 | November 23, 2010 - 18:26
Completely missed this Louise - agree with Maggy and Sunday's Child although I can't tell if the warzone is a metaphor or not? (I think it is) :-)
Louise178 | November 23, 2010 - 19:09
Yes it is :) don't worry I don't get the chance to read much on here at the moment myself, so I miss people's writing a bit, am trying to do a course at the moment :)
Oldwarrior | December 16, 2010 - 18:29
Well done! It brought back bad memories!!
Louise178 | December 16, 2010 - 22:19
Sorry it brought back bad memories for you though :(