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Posted by Margharita on August 19, 2010 - 10:32
from the ABC set Responses

I remember her sadness after each visit to her mother: ‘Gran is getting so vague’. As we drive home from our latest visit to her I sigh and shake my head: ‘Gran is getting so vague.’ In the rear view mirror I catch sight of my children, watching the sadness in my eyes: I see into their future, and mine.

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tcook | August 19, 2010 - 12:15

Very good indeed - possible my favourite of these so far.

McWilfo | August 19, 2010 - 12:57

I agree - it unfolds a little more with each word and then you make sense of it all. Very clever. Liked the repetition of words as well - this emphasises the sombre tone somehow.

Margharita | August 19, 2010 - 13:27

Thank you both - and for the cherry, Tony. I actually sat down to write something funny, but it didn't quite come out that way...:(

luigi_pagano | August 19, 2010 - 14:09

"In the rear view mirror I catch sight of my children, watching the sadness in my eyes: I see into their future, and mine."
These lines sum up the vulnerability we all feel and which you so cleverly describe in this short piece.
Very good.

MistakenMagic | August 20, 2010 - 11:01

I agree with Luigi, those last lines are spot on. Well done on the cherry ;)

Magic xxx

Margharita | August 20, 2010 - 11:06

Thanks, Luigi and Magic. And congrats on the Twitter/Facebook pick, Magic!

MistakenMagic | August 20, 2010 - 11:19

Thank you Margharita! It really was the cherry on top of a fantastic day ;)

Magic xxx

darkenwolf | August 24, 2010 - 12:59

Very good, short, sweet and to the point. Well done on the cherry
;)

Margharita | August 27, 2010 - 14:57

Thanks for taking the time to read.