Blossoming

Wow, I see this is something very emotional or important to you however, good work expressing your emotions Mistakenmagic. For a man I probably felt only a fraction of what you felt during this process, so I probably would have cried to this piece if I was a girl. Anyways if your still a teenager growing up, it's all good it's the stages to beauty (just think about it like that). If your' grown up then I'm probably sure you already noticed that blossoming has revealed your real beauty.

Smile :)

Hello Pinda! I'm almosy eighteen so I guess still a teenager but almost out the other side of the process. Thank you for your kind words :)

Magic xxx

18, cool. I'm sure you will be alll good now but if not tell the guys to watch out for your 20th birthday. They will be after you :)

The last stanza is very powerful.

'I wondered, was this what blossoming meant –
wishing you had never waved childhood goodbye?'

I think these two lines are among the best you've written. However, I don't mean to say that only the last stanza is effective. The whole piece is absolutely brilliant. The imagery is spellbinding and the emotion slips through the lines so effortlessly. It's a great poem.

Well done, as always ;-)

Nathan xox

Aww thank you so much Nathan! I'm really glad you like the final stanza as this poem needed a fair bit of redrafting - especially the ending so I'm happy it's worked out!

Magic xxx

It was worth the effort Magic - deceptively simple and a great read:)
sarah x

Thank you Sarah! :)

Magic xxx

Ah, the joys of being a teenager. Don't worry, it doesn't last for ever, most people are over it by 35!

I think you might mean 'navel', unless it's about sailors.

magic, you conveyed very well how weird that whole early teenage part of life feels - when you're not sure you want to grow up - it was nicely simple but said everything

Thank you for pointing that out Footsie! Can't believe I didn't notice before ;)

And thanks for your comments insert, I'm glad you enjoyed the poem.

And a cherry! Thank you cherry fairies!

Magic xxx

Sorry I didn't spot the 'naval' either, Magic;-)

Well done, on a much deserved Cherry.

Tina xxx

Thank you Tina! Don't worry about the 'navel' thing - it's edited now ;)

Magic xxx

i keep reading your offerings and marvel at your talent and sensitivity. This is wonderful.
MG

Them bra straps are a real curse, I had so much trouble with them in my teens.

Great poem Magic,absolutely superb; the cherry was a given. ;)

Chris X

Wow, thank you MG! I'm glad you liked the poem ;)

Hey Chris! Yes, humanity's greatest curse, the bra straps, for guys and girls ;)

Magic xxx

An excellent poem.
Love your word choices: the bra's 'teeth' and the jeans' button like a 'cork'. Great images. Gives a complete and tactile sense of the female body.
Great work, Magic! Well done.

Thank you Sikander ;)

Magic xxx

Well done on the cherry, Magic. I can relate to this, as I'm sure loads of teenage girls can, but you describe such insecurities in a beautiful and delicate way, very heartfelt. This piece is filled with sensitivity as well. I love these lines;

'I had a circle print below my navel,
another scar from the umbilical cord...'

And the cork imagery, and the bra straps "Fault lines".

Also this paragraph;
'My thighs stared back, smirking,
discoloured and stretch-mark laced.
My hesitant fingers mapped each path
that swelled to a forest.'

lol I loved it all really! I hope that you have realized that you are a beautiful girl as you have grown up. :)

Beeme xx

Hello Beeme! Haven't seen you around in what feels like ages so it's great to hear from you ;)

I'm so glad you can relate to this piece, because I guess it wasn't written only for myself but for all the women and teenage girls out there who have been through a rough time!

I'm still amazed at the reception this poem has received and I just want to thank again all those who have commented and have made me smile :)

Magic xxx

new mistakenmagic
congrats: on well earnt cherry
very hard to write I imagine.
julie x (:-

Hello Julie! Yes this was a difficult poem to write as the memories are not that distant but I treat writing like a sort of therapy and it has helped me face up to old ghosts! Thank you for your comment ;)

Magic xxx

here i am...tardy to the party! not really much i can add to the previous comments. congrats on the cherry and this is a deserving poem. to whom it may concern, i've seen visual evidence of mistaken magics beauty.

jason

Better late than never, Jason! ;)

Magic xxx

This almost brought a tear to my eye, I remember feeling much the same! The genius of a good writer to conjure real feelings and memories in just a few words. Brilliant.

Thank you so much, marionwozere! I did write this poem hoping to help others who have suffered similar experiences. I'm glad this one touched you ;)

Magic xxx