When You Left

These particular lines;
The sun slit her glowing wrists
and collapsed onto the horizon.
Impressed me, very well done :)
Yaz

Now this, I like;-) This stanza, my favourite:-

"My clothes curled from my skin.
Buttons, rebelled, stitches unpicked themselves,
thread by thread ..."

Another little cracker, Magic.

Tina :-)xxx

Loved the powerful imagery - not sure about the repeated line.

Yazmin - Thank you! I love those lines too ;)

Tina - That has to be my favourite stanza, thanks for all your help :)

JackieGirl - Thank you for your comment :) The repeated line is what this poem is all about. The rhythm it creates the idea of the narrator going backawards and forwards - running in circles and constantly reliving everything - looking for a reason why he left her. He broke her heart and she's trapped in Limbo without him.

Magic xxx

This is amazing, with every line I understood and felt the emotion hidden in the meaning.

hannahxx

I really like the line repetition. It is the simplistic chorus to the heavy, image-laden, sad verses. A very good piece indeed.

Hannah - Thank you so mucc! And a belated welcome to ABCtales ;)

Dynamaso - Cheers! Glad you support the repetition as it really is what makes the poem :)

Magic xxx

Very powerful. I also love the stanza quoted by Tina. Amazing work, well done as always.

Nathan.

xox

Thank you Nathan! Yes, definitely my favourite stanza ;)

Magic xxx

geez, i skip out for a few days and now i'm way behind on commenting on magic's newest piece! i'm totally on board with the line repetition, i think dynamaso nailed it on that one.
"Our garden forgot spring, forgot summer." -- i love this line, it gives scope (not in a minty-fresh way.
excellent work, magic!

jason

Thank you so much Jason! And better late than never ;) Glad you're 'on board' with the repetition!

Magic xxx

brilliant as i have come to expect from you - very powerfull.
;)