You are the word that never rhymes with anything.
You are like the clumsy simile that sits and grins.
You are the rogue 'a'
that hangs on the end of a line when it shouldn't.
You are the metaphor supposed
to tie the poem together. Only it doesn't.
You are the line of the poem, always a little longer than the rest.
You are the personification of something mundane;
it's not 'Wow!' - but it tries its best.
You are the stanza that refuses punctuation
and kicks commas up like stone chippings;
discards full stops like footballs
in other people's gardens
You are the loose paving stone of -
a line my tongue trips over - every time!
You are a rogue half-rhyme.
You are the last line that reads like an epilogue.
You are imagery that considers itself God.
You are the reader that just didn't 'get it'.
You are the poet.
Comments
Curse of 222 | September 24, 2009 - 02:21
there are some really good lines here and the concept is entertaining. you pull it off well. i might steal "rogue half-rhyme" as my nickname.
jason, i am a rogue half-rhyme
MistakenMagic | September 24, 2009 - 06:29
Thank you 'Rogue half-rhyme'! Hmmm ... I really should be 'the poet' but for now my nickname shall be 'clumsy simile' ;)
Clumsy Simile xxx
threeleafshamrock | September 24, 2009 - 10:24
I agree with all Jason says; very entertaining, as usual...Think I'll be the epilogue ;) XXXX
MistakenMagic | September 24, 2009 - 14:58
Haha, Ok Mr. Epilogue! And thank you for your comment ;)
Magic xxx
vidit.chopra | September 24, 2009 - 16:59
These two words are specially for you- "Perfection Personified"
What thoughts! This one is thoroughly entertaining.
Well can I be God in this one. LOL
God xxx
MistakenMagic | September 24, 2009 - 17:25
Thank you 'God'! ;)
Clumsy Simile xxx
P.S Just realised some lines lost words in the posting - now edited so it should read better!
Silver Spun Sand | September 24, 2009 - 17:38
Well, dear Magic - I think it's down to me to be the 'loose paving stone';-)
Originality, as usual, from your pen and thoroughly enjoyable.
Tina xxxx
MistakenMagic | September 24, 2009 - 17:46
Hehe, thank you Tina! 'Loose Paving Stone' - not at all ;)
Clumsy Simile xxx
Nathan Bednarek | September 24, 2009 - 17:48
This is really good. The structure is so effective! Another gem from you Magic. Well done!
Nathan xox
MistakenMagic | September 24, 2009 - 17:51
Thank you Nathan! Seen as everyone else has - any particular line/thing you want ownership of? :P
Clumsy Simile xxx
Cavalcaderl | September 26, 2009 - 09:04
New Mistakenmagic
well done on the well
earnt cherry. On a very
difficult poetic verses:
and words put and thought
up brilliantly done!the
word simile I thought was
smile so keep on (smiling!
julie x (:-
MistakenMagic | September 26, 2009 - 14:51
Hey Julie, simile or smile your comment has made me smile! ;)
Clumsy simile xxx
SundaysChild | September 26, 2009 - 20:30
Wonderfully original- Magic, you really are superb!
x
MistakenMagic | September 26, 2009 - 21:38
Thank you SundaysChild ;)
Clumsy Simile xxx
bren3348 | September 28, 2009 - 14:41
Your poem was just brilliant - loved it Bx
MistakenMagic | September 28, 2009 - 17:19
Wow, cheers bren3348! Really glad you enjoyed it ;)
Clumsy Simile xxx (Yes, I will keep this name up as long as people comment on here hehe)
sarah wilson | September 29, 2009 - 20:08
Love this one Magic xx
MistakenMagic | September 30, 2009 - 14:58
Thank you Sarah!
Clumsy Simile xxx
Curse of 222 | September 30, 2009 - 21:25
i'm only posting to keep the nickname alive.
rogue half-rhyme xxx
MistakenMagic | October 1, 2009 - 16:20
Haha, ok Jason - looks good to have more comments on my poem anyway :P
Clumsy Simile xxx
kuno-chan | October 3, 2009 - 00:07
amazing. i that is what i feel like with someone. how you put into words i dont know but thank you
MistakenMagic | October 3, 2009 - 10:02
Hey there Kuno-chan! Thank you so much for commenting and I'm glad you took something from the poem. I think we've all felt this way about someone, but things always work out in the end ;)
Clumsy Simile xxx
Nick.A | October 12, 2009 - 22:26
Love the rhyming very subtle and a pleasure to read.
MistakenMagic | October 13, 2009 - 17:32
Cheers Nick.A! Glad you enjoyed :)
Magic xxx
fire | October 24, 2009 - 22:36
Made me smile :)