Moments Remembered (A Haiku)

Cherry

By Natalia

Wed, 05 Sep 2012
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11 comments
 

Pain whispers to me
It leaves me hanging, halfway
I wish I was dead

Moments are entombed
Death, every moment closer
Nights- so much longer

Professions of love
Now without any meaning
They were alive- once

Everything is bare
Where the flowers used to bloom
Is nothing; a void

Someday when I'm old
I will look upon these days
And smile at these words

Certificate U
Poem
Haikus for the Soul
Fantasy

Comments

Submitted by Sooz006 on
you have taken the discipline and made every syllable count. This works really well. Best thing I've read of yours yet.

 

Submitted by jolono on
Yep agree with Sooz on this, great poem, well done on the cherry.

 

Submitted by sid on
By far the best I've ever read of yours, and a tricky format, too. Very well deserved cherries!

 

Submitted by Natalia on
Thanks everyone! Aaaahhhh I can't believe it...my first cherry!! Thanks for the continuing support, guys. Natalia

Natalia :)

Submitted by Natalia on
Thanks White Dwarf. I'm overwhelmed. It means a lot to have experienced folks like you comment!

Natalia :)

Submitted by Jessiibear on
Congrats on your first cherry, Natalia! Must feel nice; a real virtual pat on the back. I really liked this one. The flow was fantastic. :)

Jess

Submitted by Natalia on
Thanks so much, Jess! Yeah it feels like...well I guess I could write another poem just about my happiness! I'm glad you liked this. Natalia

Natalia :)

Submitted by scratch on
Hello Natalia. I like this as the others do. Well done. Big smile from me. 8-)

 

Submitted by Natalia on
Thanks again scratch!

Natalia :)

Submitted by Richard L. Prov... on
Very nice, Natalie. A poem of overcoming, as doing a pushup---tough at first, with perseverance--- perfection. Ah, the joy of stepping outside yourself. Keep writing, Richard LP
Richard L. Provencher

Submitted by Natalia on
Thanks, Rich :)

Natalia :)