The wake

I'am not allowed to go today.
'Abit too young'...is what they say.
A baby sitter looks after me.
Watches telly and drinks Nana's tea.
A bell rings out across the air.
I sit beneath my table lair.
Grandads gone now and i feel sad.
I'll miss his tickles and calling me lad.
Eventually a crowd appears.
A rabble of noise is all i hear.
I sit very still and wont come out.
All i see is black shoes about.
I still don't move, Nana shouts my name.
'Has anyone seen him?'.
They all answer the same.
It's then a prawn sandwhich falls with a splat.
I see it explode all over the mat.
Knees bend with a 'crack' to pick up the mess.
Two eyes have found me , its Auntie Tess.
'Mum i've found him , he's under here'.
Its Nana who grabs me then pulls me near.
She gives me a cuddle then hoists me up.
'So thats where you were you naughty pup'.
'Now be a brave boy and come join the wake'.
I don't understand but then i see cake.
Swinging my legs as i munch,i dont feel nearly as bad.
But i'll still miss his tickles and him callimg me lad.

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Comments

Denzella | January 18, 2012 - 05:49

Hello onangelswings1111,

This is a really nice poem and one that I thoroughly enjoyed. The last line does it for me. Even though he's got cake he is wise enough to realise his Grandad's not going to be tickling him anymore or calling him 'lad'.

Poignant!

Good luck with the competition.

onangelswings1111 | January 18, 2012 - 16:45

Thanks Denzella for the feed back,it really meant alot.I'am just a beginner at this writing lark. But i love it. Iam so glad my friend told me about the web-site . It's a way for me to learn and grow. Ive read some great things already. Will read your work and give you my honest unprofessional opinion.Take care x

Tuffty67 | February 3, 2012 - 12:28

Real fab read, enjoyed :)

onangelswings1111 | March 9, 2012 - 17:31

Not always fast at replying but thankyou for the comment