Past the Night of Day

Richard, this has a different feel from your other stuff, more serious and considered. I like short poetry especially when it is as well observed as this. A couple of observations if I may?

Try and find a better adjective than "clash" to describe the lightning.

I don't think that there is any need for the double hyphen between the two stanzas, in fact I think that their inclusion detracts from the flow of the poetry. Please remember that this is only my subjective and personal opinion.

A good poem Richard, well done.

Thank you so much for your astute suggestions, Scratch. I always welcome, without reservation, observations to improve my writing. (I used your suggestions, see poem again) I agree, a short poem is a challenge, since so much has to be perceived in the words. Check our latest short story, a Christmas one. Richard LP