Take a blank page, clean, pristine;
consider its whiteness, its purity,
yet know you must spoil it
Choose then your weapon;
take ink's heavy tread
stamping across your page,
confident, bold, arrogantly indelible,
or maybe pencil's childish inconstancy
sharp, bright at first, but tiring quickly, blurring
into a finger-smudged scribblement,
easily erased
The test then;
Hold it up, look through it, look at the sun,
does the colour spill, pour down, raining
a confetti of light, spangling your hair,
gilding your eyes till they glitter like topaz...
No matter
Try it for depth, for reflection;
go out, on a gibbous night, hold the page before you
like an offering, tilt it, catch a star in the act of winking.
Aim for the the moon, watch closely,
does she tremor, shimmering, trapped in the whiteness,
a negative of the sun, rendered in mercury and chalk...
Tear it up...
Comments
kheldar | June 20, 2011 - 09:32
This is absolutely brilliant Shirley!! I hope it does well in the competition, it certainly deserves to.
:--) xxx
Beeme | June 20, 2011 - 10:03
I agree- good luck in the competition. The imagery is gorgeous. I wish i'd wrote this ;)
Beeme xx
Silver Spun Sand | June 20, 2011 - 11:33
Hi there, Shoe. Enjoyed this very much.
Just a couple of minor points. Second line, should be 'its whiteness' and 'its purity'. And the last line, do you mean 'mercury'?
Love the imagery, especially 'the confetti of light, splangling your hair'.
The best of luck with the competition;-)
Tina
Highhat | June 20, 2011 - 11:35
Beautiful imagery-good luck
insertponceyfre... | June 20, 2011 - 13:03
wonderful! good luck with the competition
Cavalcaderl | June 20, 2011 - 15:30
new shoe
Good luck with the comp entry.
Love the images and magic words
in this. Especially the last stanza
julie x.
seashore | June 20, 2011 - 16:40
Really good writing - loved it
Nathan Bednarek | June 20, 2011 - 21:31
Yes, very strong and a thoroughly fantastic poem. I really enjoyed this and I love the fact you kept the Let's Start Again theme without actually having to use those words in your poem.
Just make sure you give this a quick grammar check up though ;-) probably just typos.
Other than that, well done.
I hope it gets the credit it deserves ;-)
Nathan.
ScoZen | June 21, 2011 - 15:00
Absolutly delightful.
Some paper is just to nice to write on.
Fingers X for comp.
shoe | June 21, 2011 - 15:37
Thanks all for the support and luck!
Special thanks to Tina, for spotting those errors,
always my weak point!! corrected now.
and good luck to all you other entrants,:}
fatboy74 | June 21, 2011 - 20:48
Very strong poem for the comp I love in particular the last section. Well done shoe and good luck. :-)
shoe | June 22, 2011 - 15:50
cheers FB, and you!
maggyvaneijk | June 22, 2011 - 21:56
woah. Such a strong poem, my fingers are crossed for this unique interpretation.
SundaysChild | July 2, 2011 - 13:30
Just getting round to reading comp entries- this is wonderful shoe. Truly beautiful imagery. Best of luck to you xx
awsamy | July 3, 2011 - 12:55
This is a beautiful poem unique concept :) best of luck :) xx
shoe | July 5, 2011 - 16:44
Thank you very, very much,:}
ScoZen | November 4, 2011 - 17:17
Hello there shoe.
Just to say I happened to visit a specialist stationary shop the other day and came across handmade sheets of beautiful paper.
Your story came to mind so I bought a sheet.
I'm going to keep it "...clean, pristine..."
Regards