Votives spring to life
on the windowsill...
dance a minuet
to Mozart.
We share
wine...cigarettes
and secrets, well into
the evening
she traces shadows
on my face with her
fingertips – I follow
the stutter of her eyelids.
There was too much
pain today, she tells me....
and the snow-white
feathers by the hedge
too much to take.
The fall of a dove –
only the smallest
of happenings,
as we sit and watch
sunset over the bay;
hope, eclipsing
ink-black water.
Comments
fatboy74 | July 20, 2011 - 20:27
Stutter of her eyelids - but not only that, all wonderful descriptive writing Tina - sensous and claustrophobic if that makes sense. :-)
Silver Spun Sand | July 20, 2011 - 20:32
Yes, it does, fb;-) Pleased you enjoyed.
Tina
Beeme | July 20, 2011 - 21:40
I love this :) Just amazing Tina xxx
Silver Spun Sand | July 20, 2011 - 22:45
Thanks, Beeme;-)
Tina xxx
Highhat | July 21, 2011 - 03:51
"hope, eclipsing ink-black water "
what a wonderful image Tina. I enjoyed this-Mozart was such a genius- did you see Amadeus? 400 years and still going strong. Pretty clever , eh?
atb
;)Pia
have a lovely wednesday.
Silver Spun Sand | July 21, 2011 - 09:33
Thanks, so much, Pia...and you have a lovely Thursday, too;-)Oh, and by the way, yes I did see Amadeus. AMAZING;-) Like the man himself, indeed!
Tina
skinner_jennifer | July 21, 2011 - 16:29
I agree with Pia about this poem and would pick out
the lines she picked out too. Such wonderful
descriptions.
Hope you are well and having a good day.
Jenny.
Silver Spun Sand | July 21, 2011 - 18:08
Thanks, Jenny;-) Pleased you enjoyed.
Yes, have had a lovely day, thank you, despite the downpours, and I hope you've managed to dodge them.
Tina
rjnewlyn | July 21, 2011 - 21:32
Ah yes - very wonderful. Just like night-music and amazing last three lines. A good antidote to a dull rainy day.
Rob
barryj1 | July 21, 2011 - 21:46
... hope, eclipsing
ink-black water.
Well, that's an optimistic note to end on. I like poems that tell stories, which this one does rather effortlessly. Nice!
Cavalcaderl | July 21, 2011 - 22:17
new Silver-Spun-Sand
well deserved cherry! tina
and enjoyed very good way of the story.
No wet yesterday for n/home had sit on wet skirt etc;
buses packed so half an hour late, and person finished half an hour early so only two songs, my fault being late.
I wish you a "Very Happy Anniversary to-morrow Friday" 22nd July 2011.
and to your's have a Wonderful day,AND ALL YOUR DREAMS COME TRUE. and Full of Surprises I hope, and the champagne, HUGS AND KISSES.
INCASE I am up late, or out shop quickly.
all the best julie xx
Silver Spun Sand | July 22, 2011 - 09:19
Thanks, barry;-) Have a good weekend.
Tina
Silver Spun Sand | July 22, 2011 - 09:24
Thanks for reading this one, Julie.
And you remembered our anniversary. Thanks, so much.
We have to pinch ourselves to think it was forty-four years ago today we tied that knot. A lot has happened since then; for worse and more importantly, for the better, so we have much to be thankful for.
Shall pass on your good wishes to my other half and thanks again;-) Have a lovely weekend.
Tina xx
Silver Spun Sand | July 22, 2011 - 09:25
Thanks, Rob. I shall try and send some sunshine to you, as you did to me;-)
Tina
Cavalcaderl | July 22, 2011 - 13:22
new Silver spun-sand
If only I knew what I know now.
All part of life aye! Rocky smooth sad happy accidents even deserted, as well you know the course of life! sometimes. I can't do right.
So I wish you typing it properly. I am
Tina
A VERY HAPPY ANNIVERSARY To You Both.
mEMORIES PHOTOS DRINKS SURPRISES.Roses. AND BE TRULY BLESSED.
.
in all you do to-day don't forget write a poem on it
romance ah!
Sun out a bit.
Bus pass found thank goodness, no car been 2 weeks wait and pay to expensive. So taking small box of chocs shop for thanks, and maybe cuddly toy lady in nursing home, cried as singing finished early, I kind of do actions of "My favourite things"
big smile as can't talk. One mentioned take her to bed 3.30pm in day or room shame.
ALL THE BEST julie xx