I Saw Me
I saw me on the other side of the river
I saw me in a car that just drove by
I saw me in a job that eats you inside
But I never once heard me asking why
I saw me bored in a supermarket aisle
I saw me buying things I don’t need
I saw me storing things I’ll never use
But I never asked who fed my greed
Until now
Until now
When I caught the scent
Of a sacrificial cow
I saw me standing in a queue
I saw you were doing the same
I saw the time was laughing at me
This is a picture in a broken frame
I saw me underneath a naked tree
I saw me tired like a pale yellow light
I saw the meaning of life today
And it wasn’t such a beautiful sight
Until now
Until now
When I realised I didn’t have to apologise
crawl or bow
©JmN 2011
Comments
seashore | December 7, 2011 - 15:17
I really like this smokejack - but did you mean `curtsey' in the last line?
smokejack | December 7, 2011 - 16:23
Hi Seashore thanks for comment and spotting typo too! I've change the word as it meant the same as bow. Appreciate you taking time out to read this. Cheers
seashore | December 7, 2011 - 22:31
Yes much better with `crawl or bow'.... and definitely deserving of the cherry!
sandspirit | December 8, 2011 - 10:14
I enjoyed this, the idea that I can watch myself, and have opinions and feelings about what I see. So who or what is this "I"? Very nicely captured.
Highhat | December 9, 2011 - 05:49
Somehow or every which way I found this beautiful. A lot of afterthought. I think it was very powerful and melodic. Hmm thanks for a brilliant read.
;)Pia
catherine poarch | December 9, 2011 - 13:15
i like this too, especially the short, simple lines, repetiveness...can't spell that!...and then change of rhythm. i found five minutes at work for a quick look at someone elses' poems and this was worth it.
catherine