Run they screamed, he can't get you now,
A mirror is what you need,
Turn him around,
My feet are burning,
Just like my skin,
Crash goes the ground as the chase begins,
Fee fie, four on the rum,
I'll get you my boy,
Billy, fetch me ma gun,
They been eating my eggs again,
Those filthy little hobgoblins,
If I catch you boy I'm gonna sacrifice your heart,
Pull on your hair and twist you apart
Run they screamed, he may catch you now,
A mirror you need, show him his legs,
Be quick for heaven's sake,
The sun has almost set,
Roll up roll up, were still taking bets,
Fee fie, piddly boo,
When I find that human I'm gonna tear him in two,
Pull off his ears and lick him I swear,
A good right hand, and a pull of his hair,
Quick run, its over there,
Persius dropped it,
When he seen Medusa's hair,
So frail and fragile,
But a giant none the less,
Now make it back before he plucks you from the nest,
I turned and hid, the giant was close,
Cornered and smeared, I was almost toast,
Then quick as a flash,
I climbed up a mast,
Pulled out the mirror,
An cracked an egg on his back,
Haha you beast, you see it's me,
I showed him the mirror,
He saw a reflection of his knee's,
Oh the knobbles, that he had never known,
The giant collapsed,
Like Goliath to the stone.
Comments
skinner_jennifer | August 12, 2010 - 15:17
Hi Willsimpson,
Hey great piece, I love the words especially,
Oh the knobbles, that he had never known.
That kinda made me laugh.
Jenny.
WillSimpson | August 12, 2010 - 16:25
Thanks, I had a dream last night about a giant chasing me, The only way to stop him was showing him a mirror reflection of himself, was a weird dream, also an enlightening one.
skinner_jennifer | August 12, 2010 - 17:30
Hi Willsimpson,
That is a very weird dream, it doesn't seem quite so
funny now. I don't think I would like to be chased
by a giant, not even in a dream, scary.
Still a good piece of work though.
Jenny.
insertponceyfre... | August 12, 2010 - 20:57
I really like the pace of this nightmarish chase - it makes it come alive, and I also like the way you've borrowed some bits of nursery rhymes too, and scrambled them up. It would make a very good mad and scary nonsense poem for children. You illustrated some of your other work didn't you? Have you thought of doing the same for this?
There are a few apostrophes missing btw - it would definitely be worth putting them in
WillSimpson | August 12, 2010 - 21:08
Thanks for the comment, I've had a look through could only see one missing, can you see anymore?
I don't normally pay that much attention to the grammar I suppose it makes a difference. Keep the skills of correct language alive and all that, lol.
I'll try do some drawings when I get some paper, broke as a window cleaner at the moment though.
insertponceyfre... | August 12, 2010 - 21:53
You're right Will - only one. Sorry about that
Quick run, its over there
but you also have one where there shouldn't be one:
He saw a reflection of his knee's,
I hope you do manage to illustrate it oneday
darkenwolf | August 13, 2010 - 17:50
Not bad sort of like ye olde poems - like something a mother would read to a child to scare them into obedience maybe. Good work
;)
Kahdai | August 30, 2010 - 22:16
Here ii thought you were carrying on from the beanstalk you planted in the end of the last poem? K