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Failing Belief

Posted by Beeme on March 30, 2011 - 13:47

I
I dig my nails
into the soil,
trying to peel
back the layers.
Filling in
gaps of time,
as if you
are the dirt
brown, smudged skin
clinging…
like tissue
or roots.
My fingers
divers
dragging our lake,
feeling for you.

II
Your spirit
falls away
from your body;
like wallpaper
from whitewashed walls.
Dishevelled angel wings,
turned up at the edges
like an old sepia photograph
a memory of something lost.

III
Memories fall apart;
Your image is dissolving…
I pray,
to keep you close.
Sketch the outline of your body;
re-building…
the layers which held you together.
Nothing more;
than prayers fill your veins

IV
Your body;
hangs...
a skeletal chandelier.
Sparkling...
in sun light.
Fragments of stained glass;
reflecting memories.
Whilst your frame;
crumbles....
the tears on your cheek;
shining...
rouge diamonds.

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Comments

ScoZen | March 30, 2011 - 14:01

Ahh, Beeme.
What a tale of sadness you weave.
I can imagine this written in a little illustrated book.
Wonderful, all of it.

pinda | March 30, 2011 - 14:29

This is a provocative poem Beeme,

"clinging…
like tissue
or roots.
My fingers
divers
dragging our lake,
feeling for you"

The imagery this stanza gives off is mind-blowing.

Well done and keep your head up :)

X
Pinda

Beeme | March 30, 2011 - 15:51

Thank you so much Pinda and ScoZen! I'm happy you both enjoyed and I will do, thank you Pinda :)

Beeme xx

MistakenMagic | March 30, 2011 - 16:56

The third and fourth stanzas are my favourites, Beeme! Lovely images. Just noticed a typo with your Roman numerals - 'V' should be 'IV' ;)

Magic xxx

shoe | March 30, 2011 - 17:15

These are beautiful, I really love the third one, and tears will always be 'rouge diamonds' for me now!

Beeme | March 30, 2011 - 18:31

Ahh thank you magic corrected the numeral, I don't know how I missed the I lol :) Glad you enjoyed :)

Beeme xx

Beeme | March 30, 2011 - 18:33

Thank you so much Shoe! Glad you liked these :)

Beeme xx

seashore | March 31, 2011 - 14:24

These are working really well as `themes'.

insertponceyfre... | March 31, 2011 - 19:01

I love the third stanza Beeme

Beeme | April 1, 2011 - 08:09

Thank you very much Seashore :) and Insert. Happy your enjoying these :)

Beeme xx

fatboy74 | April 1, 2011 - 20:30

This works equally as well Beeme - they do sit so well together and it's so good to see more of your words on the page like this. :-)

Beeme | April 6, 2011 - 15:46

Thank you :-)

Beeme xx