A ballet called Time

I think this works excellently, pia. The line structure which you use, gives the poem a gentle rhythm reminiscent of the graceful movement of a ballerina. Culminating, of course, in that lovely last line.

Much enjoyed;-)

Tina

This is beautiful Pia, you have captured time so
well, how wonderful to see time as a ballet, a very
original poem of which I really admire you for.

Thankyou for a beautiful, moving read.

Jenny.

I agree- very original. Good work.

I think with this and faith you are hitting the right notes pia this one I really like again. :-)

new Highhat
Hello! This is great.
Sorry no reply yet to you.
Just tuned in here. Both nursing bad bug
cold and throat, laughing, who is worse.
You must be a mind reader, did you do ballett?
Great poem of time and poise, elderly adults can
now joing. Yep I always wanted to be one. Now achieved shoes and tu-tu. If one types into web;
it show the beg; steps. I couldn't go 5 lessons cos.
back. But one day I will put on quietly? Here and tu-tu and pink tights and just do st five steps. To most
favouite ballet "Swan Lake" bought a week ago. And the film we saw daughter and I. "Natalie Portman" in
"The Black Swan" great mind wise job understand, top
actress award."The Kings Speech" brilliant "Colin Firth. I fell over on the pavement ow! Daughter's new wedged boots bought me. Must be the old devil fat moon, as you say.
Love the way you have made steps and proper names to
ballett in a poem, very clever.
Type one on Denmark the main things and colours and beauty please.
x cavalcaderl julie xx
Just noticed well deserved cherry!
Tu-Tu for now.

Yes! A word-dance, perfect. Loved it.

Tina- thank you very much for your comment- a lovely one- really appreciate you reading my stuff. Thought it might be a bit up your alley ;D
;)Pia

Hi Jenny
It struck me, in my age of ease, that time may very well be a ballet with the beautiful movements. I like contemporary ballet as well but I suppose I am a bit old fashioned when I hang on to the classical which is the main theme here. Have seen Nutcracker and Swan Lake with the Royal Danish Ballet Company. Have only seen contemporary on the telly.
Thank you so much for your kind comment. Glad you enjoyed it.
Pia ;)

Thanks Sundayschild- glad you enjoyed and took the time to leave a comment.
;)Pia

Hi Fatboy
I am finding it rather exciting writing something different for a change. Instead of all that confessional stuff. The past has been worked on for quite a while so that leaves me to do a bit of experimenting.
Thank you for noticing.
;)Pia

Thanks seashore- glad you enjoyed and took the time to tell me.
;)Pia

Julie
so kind of you to leave a comment. Thank you very much.
well a very beautiful place in Denmark would be the big beech forests. In Spring the ground between the trees is simply abundant with white anemones (and yellow and blue ones in the south)- it is such a joy to see. We have a very long winter, i.e the light dwindles and it is very grey but the days with thick snow on the ground and the sun up high are pretty charming.
The forest is my favourite place of beauty. In summer we have lots of sun and in winter lots of thick snow. We have temperatures up to 30 degrees C. in summer and in winter down 15 below zero. I like the summer the most. Heat doesn't worry me- all the flowers are blooming and children play outside until late in the evening (the sun doesn't set until 11 o'clock and rises at 3am)the blackbird is chirping and the young people look at each other with love in their eyes. Ha ha
Hope that answers your question?
You take care Julie- wear some sensible shoes please !!
ATB
;)Pia

thanks a lot cherry fairies- have a great weekend
;)Pia

Reading this was a delightful way to spend some time.

Hi Pia,

yes I do love ballet and have seen Swan Lake and
The Nutcracker, but sadly only on TV on the arts
channel, but I was mesmerized, simply beautiful.

Congratulations on the cherries well deserved.

Jenny.

Oldpesky- glad you thought your time was well spent. Thanks for telling me
;)Pia

Thanks a lot Richard. Imagine you thinking of this together with Black Swan! Nice.
;)Pia

Hi Jenny
thanks for getting back to me.
;)Pia

Pia,
I like the visual quality of the poem, the repitition, the clever choice of language. This poem has a delicate, gossamer touch. It's terribly abstract but concrete and substantial at the same time. Am I making any sense? Nice! Nice! Nice poem!

Yes Barry it is abstract-. But thanks for you comment.
;)Pia

Absolutely beautiful, Pia! The extended metaphor works so well - well done on a richly-deserved cherry :)

Magic xxx

Thank you very much Magic- I appreciate your kind comment.
;Pia

First, ty for reading my chapter 2 kiss the candle goodnight.
second, you capture the rhythm of movement poise and stasis very nicely in this poem. Lovely.
TMT

Thanks for your praise Tmt- really appreciate your comment.
;)Pia