Safety

Cherry

By Highhat

Wed, 29 Sep 2010
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31 comments
 

Termites gnawing at her flesh
worms sucking the marrow of her skull
maggots chewing at her brain
She tried to scream
wasps in her mouth
snakes writhing around her limbs
standing in mud to her knees
Oysters and mussels stabbed at her feet
surrounded by mangroves
reaching out with
all encompassing roots and branches
The water flooding the swamp
High tide bursting the river banks
no scream as mud filled her mouth
The swamp was alive
Crabs crawled between her toes
Flood waters lapped up her body
The water, a murky, tepid brown.
Mud filled her eyes
engulfed by the muddy darkness
Gasping for breath
no scream
Swallowed by the mud she
returned to safety
whence she once had come

Certificate U
Poem
Horror

Comments

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Gosh pia, This is so expressive, it sounds like some horrible nightmare, when finally she wakes in her bed safe. Jenny.

 

Submitted by Highhat on
Yo she wakes up to safety- thanks for the comment Jenny- like the expressive part- thanks ;)pia

Submitted by Kahdai on
:O Ii thought it must be a nightmare too! or like an old story, glad its safe at the end ;) K

"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "

Submitted by Highhat on
yeah it's best to be safe because nightmares can easily happen even when you are awake ;) thanks for reading Kahdai pia ;)

Submitted by JoseHdz on
lovely read. must say, I read this while listening to Jimi Hendrix's 'Red House'... great experience... cheers

Submitted by Highhat on
Thank you very much for the kind comment Jose- nothing compared to your wonderful poetry - ;)pia

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Wow what a great idea to read while listening to Jimi Hendrix's 'Red House.' I'll have to try that one. Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
I had a strange experience, in my sleep I was running really fast down a hill and running through peoples houses, trying to get home, but I was lost. When I awoke in the morning, my head was buzzing, I felt like I had so much energy, it was really weird. Jenny.

 

Submitted by Highhat on
Strange Jen- dreams or rather nightmares usually tend to drain one of energy. I suppose because you gathered energy by running down hill- not as demanding as up hill- oh nonsense- I'm very silly ;)pia

Submitted by Highhat on
Am not familiar with that particular track- thanks for the hint ;) pia

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Firstly - WOW! And secondly, this is a seriously wonderful piece - so gritty and dirty (in the muddy sense of the word!) A living nightmare - but an expertly crafted one :) Magic xxx

 

Submitted by Kahdai on
its true! I crawl up mountains and fly downstairs in my sleep!

"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "

Submitted by iDrew on
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Submitted by insertponceyfre... on
well I was terrified all the way through - this was really well done Pia- totally gripping

 

Submitted by fatboy74 on
Well done on the cherry - have you been reading M R James alone late at night? :-)

 

Submitted by Highhat on
Magic- thank you for the comment- It's just as good as the cherry ;)Pia

Submitted by Highhat on
"when you least expect it you're elected- you are the lucky one" I never expected a cherry on this one- but whoever does? Thanks guys and dolls. Fabulous. ;)Pia

Submitted by Highhat on
Thank you Kahdai for reading pia ;)

Submitted by Highhat on
Thanks iDrew for commenting- love your magazine pia ;)

Submitted by Highhat on
Insert- I really appreciate your reading and commenting my pieces- yours is quality judgement along with the other talers of course. Thank you pia;)

Submitted by Highhat on
Fatboy- thanks a lot for reading and your fine comment. I am a great admirer of your work so your comment means a lot to me.Nope- haven't been reading MR James late at night!!! ;)pia

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Congratulations on the cherries Pia, you wrote a brilliant piece here, well deserved. Jenny.

 

Submitted by Highhat on
Thanks a lot Jenny and thanks for reading- greatly appreciated pia ;)

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
I've arrived at the party late...sorry;-) A wonderful piece - well deserving of its cherry, pia. Tina

 

Submitted by Highhat on
Thank You for reading and commenting Tina ;)pia

Submitted by prettyrose on
Hi Pia :) Yes very Expressive like Jenny said and you obviously have a brilliant talent and express like, to some as it should be :) although I had to read it twice to understand where you were going with it, that's me not you lol. So well done :)

smiley Keep Smiling

Keep Writing xxx

Submitted by Highhat on
I may update it as you are not the only one who had difficulty in grasping the meaning ;) thanks for the kind comment prettyrose- yea a lovely name you have ;) pia

Submitted by well-wisher on
I liked this poem although I didn't understand it but it grabbed my attention, artfully turned my stomach and made my skin crawl and I like poems that can do that.

Oh look, a link. I wonder where it leads.

JoHn

Submitted by Highhat on
I think I was feeling like being a bit creepy well- wisher- thanks for reading- it was supposed to be a nightmare where she woke up eventually. ;)Pia

Submitted by prettyrose on
Your welcome Pia :) and thank you for your kind words, not sure a bout the pretty bit lol some one once told me he he but smile I always try to do so incorporated the both :) And you did achieve your goal Pia as nightmare and I always say follow the pen within and what you write is not a sin!!! again great work :))))

smiley Keep Smiling

Keep Writing xxx

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