The Twilight of the Gods

Wow! Pia, to coin a phrase from the sixties, 'this
is far out man, really psychedelic.' But seriously
how do you write such brilliant, amazing words and
it all makes sense, even though there are no full-
stops or commas?

I'm in awe of this piece Pia, I just realised there
is one comma right at the end.

These words really remind me of something the
beatles might have sung about back in the 60s, I
love, love, love it.

You are a true poet Pia.

Jenny.

Another really strong piece, Pia.

Gee thanks Jenny- I don't deserve such praise. You know I am a true hippy from the sixties so I am quite chuffed with your words. Thanks a lot.
atb
;)Pia

I really appreciate you reading Seashore (Coral? The name suits so well with Seashore ;)) and commenting. Thanks
;)Pia

Great piece of writing, very provocative words Pia.

'No tears only fear
and steaming bad conscience
Damned to the deluge
Drugged beyond recognition
Our heaven being without earth
Without God without paradise
Lost souls of sin never to be forgiven
Armageddon , the Twilight of the Gods
Don’t say a thing
Silence
A frog croaks and the stork stoops with beak open'

The ending was so sharp and intense, perfect way to end it.

X
Pinda

Thank you very much Pinda. Your words are very encouraging.
;)Pia

What an apocalyptic vision, Pia. So you were part of the hippy generation yearning "for love, not war", a sentiment that always appealed to me. A powerful poem full of "the sound and the fury" as Shakespeare would have said.

Luigi x

Luigi- I think William Faulkner wrote a book with fury in the title. Slipped my mind- sorry. Thank you very much for commenting on this one and having Shakespeare connotations- my oh my. Ha ha You bet your bottom dollar I was (and still am ) a hippy- "Make love , not war" and for god's sake "Give peace a chance "
;)Pia

Pia, I was bowled over by this, and it was only reading Jenny's comment made me realise you had used no punctuation. The effect is quite stunning and only serves to 'punctuate' the strength of this poem, is was quite some masterpiece.

More than well done.

Tina;-)

Thank you very much Tina- actually it came sort of easy while I was staring at the blank page but I did get it going there. Ha ha thank you very much for your kind comment.
;)Pia

I think that Faulkner book was The Sound and The Fury a quote from Will Shakes that Luigi mentioned. Yes like everyone else i'm impressed greatly with these vivid and energetic writings. Keep at it. :-)

Is this about the recent Japanese tsunami? I don't know, but there is something that troubles me about entering into something where one was not there - there is a presumption in entering the soul of the dying, the about to die?. One emakes presumptions where one maybe shouldn't. If it's not about that, but about something bigger, vaguer, more close to 'home' - apologies. - I know one shouldn't say anything negative or questioning here, but sometimes, in questioning, the questioning can grow if not the questioned, by the reaction of the questioned to the questioning.

animan-no it is not so much about the tsunami but somewhere along the lines of human beings destroying the earth and mankind with all the means we have atm- pollution,capitalism,war general evil. But thanks anyway for reading. You really throw me over with your way of commenting. Sometimes I feel you are mocking but really doesn't bother me that much.
cheers
;)Pia

Hi fatboy- I thought that might be the title of Faulkner's book but wasn't sure. I'm not sure whether it is one of my Faulkner reads but he is amazing. Just love him. Thank you very much for the encouragement. I am sure I can speak for the others as well- will miss you while you are in Norfolk but I hope you have a wonderful time and break no doubt.
You know Fatboy- I am so thankful for you following my poetry. it means a lot to me getting your opinion as I admire your writing so much. Thank you very much for sticking by me. I just love your poems. I usually stick to the poetry section as stories tend to become a little too "realistic" for me. Haha ;D
atb
;)Pia

Sorry, Pia, that I appear mocking. I don't mean to, though I know I can be a bit supercilious at times. I do very much agree with what you are saying about pollution, capitalism and general evil. There is a lot of that around, particularly the latter - and I like that you are making your mark in noting and countering it.

Animan- sorry I misunderstood your way of expressing yourself. At least we got that straight now. Thanks a lot for your encouragement.
;)Pia