Waves of Eternity

Hi Pia,

what beautiful, expressive words you use here, just
love the lines:

Gusts of wind
bring sheets of rain,
driving incoherently
on stringy eucalyptus bark,
printed and dashing.

But actually I love all the lines as a whole.

Thanks for a great read.

Jenny.

Thank you very much Jenny- so glad you enjoyed this poem.
;)Pia

Very evocative and vibrantly descriptive, it positively zings! I especially like the last two stanzas,

Shoe- thank you very much for your comment. I am glad you enjoyed
;)Pia

Wow Pia there is so much of this is amazing! :) K x

great job.. fun read.

jose.

Glad you enjoyed Kahdai and Jose. Thank you
;)Pia

I very much enjoyed this Pia - some pretty startling imagery and i love they way you put it all across disjointed - which I think ties in with your purpose. :-)

You are quite right Fatboy- It is meant to be disjointed as you pointed out. Thank you.
;)Pia

new Highat
Lovely descriptive poem
words melt away.like landscape view.
Like it all,lines;
Singed violin bows crescendo
snaking tones on a rainbow horizon.
julie x

Thank you very much Julie- nice of you to comment
;)Pia

I missed this one earlier, pia...I'm sorry;-) Glad I've read it now though.

You use effective imagery throughout and it is rich in wonderfully descriptive vocabulary. More than well done!

Tina;-)

Thank you very much Tina- glad you liked the vocabulary. Thank you for reading and your kind comment
;)Pia

I agree with all above. I like the first two lines best; almost haiku like.

I'm not sure if this is a straight nature poem or a symbolic poem. The "Waves Of Eternity" seem like quite unpleasant waves and you seem very hot in the poem, longing for "tangled starlight on snowy surfaces".

Is this a straight nature poem; a travel poem about a real pacific island you've been to or is it a symbolic poem? You also mention "Sizzled sobriety".
Is it a poem about sobriety?

I also like the last verse;

I stare at blades of grass in
whiplashed eternity.
The Pacific Ocean's waves.

"Whiplashed eternity" conjurs up images of hell
and I also like the idea of a poem which ends
with thoughts about eternity; the poem ends but the waves continue.

It's a good poem, full of lovely description, but, like I say, I'm not sure if I understand it all.

Hi Well-wisher. Thank you for asking questions. I'll try to answer.
mainly it is a poem about the forces of nature- eternity is forever and so are the waves in a lifetime they are just forever.
I grew up in Australia- hence the eucalyptus bark and Pacific Ocean and the great forces of nature as we see them at the moment in the floods in Queensland. Nature can be so merciless, n'est pas?
It is also about sobriety- linked with my life ;)
Hope that answers some things for you? Otherwise just ask again.
Thank you for going into such depth with it. That was the idea- of it being a bit deep.
cheers
;)Pia