Rewind the whispers
Lay your head on my shoulder
Let the leaves play in the wind
Counting my blessings
Your eyes on the lilacs
Your brow furrowed
The soil black and rich
You dig up the cadence
yet another hymn
of resourceful belief
Leave your fingertips
on the brittle surface
Diving into the blue sky and clouds
rush of cold water in the basin
In a daydream
you are in robes
with sunbeams in your hair
ready for the revels
Locked sighs
tearing away the fabric
Butterfly wings
Dust of chalk cliffs
you breathe deep
while I catch mine
Why believe in fate
when you are on my doorstep
Comments
Silver Spun Sand | May 22, 2011 - 21:01
I have to say, Pia, the penultimate stanza took me somewhat by surprise.
A wistful enigmatic poem. This stanza especially stands out for me:-
"The soil black and rich
You dig up the cadence..."
Tina;-)
Highhat | May 22, 2011 - 21:08
Thank you very much for reading and commenting Tina- that was very kind of you
I've just changed it!!
;)Pia
maisie | May 22, 2011 - 22:52
some lovely lines, great imagery!
shoe | May 23, 2011 - 09:30
lovely. and the last two verses are fab!
skinner_jennifer | May 23, 2011 - 09:31
Dear Pia,
I absolutely love this poem, it's so spiritual and
perfect, I love the lines:-
Diving into the blue sky and clouds
rush of cold water in the basin
You are definitely writing something so positive
here. Infact I've read it a couple of times, I think
all the lines are brilliant, they flow so well.
Thankyou for a perfect read.
Jenny.
seashore | May 23, 2011 - 09:36
A lovely piece, Pia. Much enjoyed.
seekerofwords | May 23, 2011 - 10:09
another hypnotic tour de force! some wonderful and exciting imagery.
Namaste,
Lenny
Highhat | May 23, 2011 - 12:08
Thanks Shoe ;) I really appreciate that you have read this poem- thank you
;)Pia
Highhat | May 23, 2011 - 12:08
Jenny- you are so kind- thank you very much for your rewarding comment
;)Pia
Highhat | May 23, 2011 - 12:09
Glad you enjoyed Coral- thank you for telling me
;)Pia
Highhat | May 23, 2011 - 12:10
Thanks Lenny- kind of you to tell me- I'm glad you enjoyed
;)Pia
fatboy74 | May 23, 2011 - 21:03
I really liked this Pia :-)
Highhat | May 23, 2011 - 21:09
Thank you FB- glad to see you again
;)Pia
Highhat | May 23, 2011 - 21:10
Thanks for the cherries eds- much appreciated
Overthetop1 | May 25, 2011 - 00:35
Sorry to be a bit late Pia. This is gorgeous. A very well - deserved cherry.
Highhat | May 25, 2011 - 04:39
Ott- thank you for reading and leaving such a great comment.
atb
;)Pia
Dynamaso | May 25, 2011 - 05:41
Yes, a very well deserved cherry. Really enjoyed this one, Pia.
Highhat | May 25, 2011 - 17:07
Thank you kindly Dynamaso
;) Pia
MistakenMagic | May 27, 2011 - 19:49
What a beautiful poem, Pia! This is simply stunning with an almost zen-like quality :) Well done on the cherries!
Magic xxx
Highhat | May 27, 2011 - 22:14
Thanks Magic-I like the zen comment from you.
;)Pia