Keys to my heart (13th December, 2010)
And her face was awash with the stars,
Twinkling, twinkling on her wet cheeks
Like diamond dust, how morning frost
Patterns pavements under cold, hard feet.
Can you hear the morning star rise?
Her beckoning call to oblivious skies,
And the moon, she weeps as she wanes…
I’m under the dark; I’m holding the reins.
The cold drowns my bones and my mind,
Numbness unwelcomed, yet somehow divine.
This is the world I cannot leave behind;
This is the dawn and the clock marks time.
Beauty lies inside the smallest things:
The white-smoke exhaust, heavy ringed
Eyes in the mirror, watching myself wake
To a new day I do not wish to begin. Again.
I’ll meet you by the frozen park swings,
Three hours past dusk and minus degrees;
I gave you my heart, yet kept the keys;
Don’t unlock what you simply don’t need.
She brings the warmth and the light,
The laughter and faith I misplaced;
She opens the doors to the night,
‘What is done cannot be erased,’ she says.
And her face was awash with the stars,
Twinkling, twinkling on her goodbyes;
Like wanderlust, I felt my feet itch,
Heard pavements call under open skies.
‘You have the keys to my heart,’ she said,
‘But the door stays locked, for love is dead.’
Comments
sue dinum | December 13, 2010 - 23:57
I felt this, Jen, the emotion and sentiment. I loved the pictures that you made for me. Well done. Nice to see you doing some poems again. From the heart?
sue
TREVOR MAYTUM | December 14, 2010 - 00:09
Me too, jennifer. I liked the imagery and the realism of this. Curious why you choose to rhyme some lines in the stanzas, but not all. Is that intentional, or just the way it comes out?
I really liked it, anyway. I can identify with it.
trev
tcook | December 14, 2010 - 16:01
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jennifer | December 14, 2010 - 19:01
Wow, thank you, Tony! That's cheered me up, I am really poorly today!
Chuffed to bits!
J x
Lem | December 14, 2010 - 21:11
This is incredible.
jennifer | December 14, 2010 - 21:19
Thank you, Sue, Trev, Lem! It's actually inspired by all the beautiful weather we've been having recently, which I both love and hate (because I fell heavily on the ice last week and really smashed up my thigh!) 'She' is metaphorical for the weather or nature, however you care to interpret! You'll notice that I refer to all the natural things in the poem as 'she' as well...
J x
fatboy74 | December 15, 2010 - 11:39
A wonderful read, well done and congrats on pod + cherry. :-)
catherine poarch | December 15, 2010 - 12:22
this has lovely pace and beautifully cold words. i also like the repeat of lines near the end.
catherine poarch
jennifer | December 17, 2010 - 14:17
Thank you, fatboy and catherine!
Trev- forgot to say - the rhymes just sort of come out. It's hard to control them sometimes. There's not rigid rhyme scheme, the words just play with sounds, and once the poem started to emerge properly, I didn't want to change what I already had to fit a 'rhyme scheme' because it just worked!
J x
jennifer | December 17, 2010 - 14:18
Thank you so much to Tony for making this Poem of the Week, I am thrilled!
This is one of those that just sort of wrote itself, it flowed out, and I love that it has made an impression!
J x
MistakenMagic | December 17, 2010 - 17:38
'Beauty lies inside the smallest things:
The white-smoke exhaust, heavy ringed
Eyes in the mirror, watching myself wake
To a new day I do not wish to begin. Again.'
- love this stanza, Jen! This is a gorgeous poem :) Many congrats on the cherry and POTW. Oh and Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year!
Magic xxx
shoe | December 17, 2010 - 17:46
Gorgeous and lyrical and most deserving P.O.W.
seashore | December 18, 2010 - 11:57
This is a really beautiful piece. I agree with shoe - `lyrical' but it's visual too. I like all of it but especially the beginning and end.
I missed it first time around - also suffering from a seasonal lurgy - but glad I to have found it via POW. Very deserving.
jennifer | December 20, 2010 - 10:54
Merry Christmas to you too, Magic, and a very Happy New Year! Thank you so much, glad you enjoyed this one!
Thank you also, shoe and seashore, for your lovely comments, how kind of you! Hope you feel better soon, seashore!
J x
Richard L. Prov... | January 12, 2011 - 01:54
This is a fine poem! Richard LP