Lingering Abstractedly

Cherry

By JoseHdz

Mon, 30 May 2011
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15 comments
 

If I had you
Over here
Closer
To me
Beneath
My touch
Beneath
My kiss
I would lean
On form
And flow
Instead of
Lingering
Abstractedly
Where
It’s night
Where the
Leaves
Shout
Obscenities
And the
Moon
Just blurs
And fades
Like memory
Like m e m o r y

Certificate U
Poem
Love

Comments

Submitted by Mummy Penguin on
Simple, eloquent and sad. Good writing. MP

Submitted by JoseHdz on
thank u! glad u appreciate the simplicity. -jose.

Submitted by Highhat on
I liked this. Very poignant ;)Pia

Submitted by JoseHdz on
thank you! :)

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on
really enjoyed this jose

 

Submitted by JoseHdz on
glad you enjoyed it! thanks ABC for the cherries/ much appreciated!

Submitted by seashore on
You are consistently good Jose. Loved it.

Submitted by JoseHdz on
you are very kind. thank you for reading. Jose.

Submitted by JoseHdz on
thank you very much; thanx for reading!

Submitted by Beeme on
Another stunning poem. I really enjoyed this. I love the last lines...well, the whole poem really. It's absolutely superb :) Beeme xx

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Submitted by JoseHdz on
aw well thank you, Beeme! Means a lot coming from you. cheers, Jose

Submitted by fatboy74 on
You have a real gift for expressing so much in so little words.

 

Submitted by JoseHdz on
thank you--your compliment means a lot to me :) cheers, Jose.

Submitted by ScoZen on
MP has already summed it up for me... "...Simple, eloquent and sad..."
ScoZen

Submitted by JoseHdz on
Thank you! glad you enjoyed this one. Jose.