My grandfather was
The true poet
The way he
Tilled the land
With his hands
Beneath the sun
He seemed to
Touch the sky
With his thoughts
My grandfather was
The true poet
The way he
Joked with
His mule
As they rode
The two of them
Alone
In the night
He seemed to
Reach the moon
With his laugh
My grandfather was
The true poet
The way he
Smoked his cigarettes
On the porch
Like a train
In the wind
He seemed to
Graze the trees
With his breath
My grandfather was
The true poet
The way he
Squinted his clear
Blue eyes
Beneath the
Brim of
His sombrero
He seemed to
Pierce the clouds
With his stare
My grandfather was
The true poet
The way he
Wrote the
Earth
With his poems
He could
Not hold
A pen
With his hands
Comments
fatboy74 | July 3, 2011 - 23:39
I'm not sure if you will have read Digging by Seamus Heaney Jose, but I think you should; it is remarkably similar to your poem, even in the way it ends. I really like that poem and I really like yours. (Sorry spotted another typo - line 14 road/rode - amazing how I don't spot them in my own)
ATB Fatboy
www.wussu.com/poems/shdigg.htm
JoseHdz | July 3, 2011 - 23:51
you are so right about Seamus' poem; it is simply beautiful! thank you for the recommendation, i will share it on my facebook :)
you have quite an eye; don't apologize, it helps me greatly to make corrections so that my poems read to their potential.
thanks again, FB!
salud,
Jose
Highhat | July 4, 2011 - 04:27
Beautiful Jose- such wonderful metaphors-what a picture !
;)Pia
JoseHdz | July 4, 2011 - 05:33
thanks, pia! glad you enjoyed this piece. it was very peaceful to write.
seashore | July 4, 2011 - 09:25
Very visual and atmospheric - I loved it.
SundaysChild | July 4, 2011 - 09:33
Stunning
Silver Spun Sand | July 4, 2011 - 10:21
Wonderful;-)
JoseHdz | July 4, 2011 - 12:27
thank you all!
glad the piece was well received.
this one was quite special for me to write; an honor really..
c h e e r s,
jose
skinner_jennifer | July 4, 2011 - 13:24
I really enjoyed your poem and it was well deserved
of the cherries.
Jenny.
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Esmerelda | July 4, 2011 - 14:49
Beautiful
JoseHdz | July 4, 2011 - 15:10
thank you, Jenny and Esmeralda!
And big thanks to you, Tony, for facebook/twitter pick of the day!
This poem was quite special for me to write so it is an absolute honor to see it appreciated.
saludos,
Jose
barryj1 | July 4, 2011 - 21:34
I like the way you physically set this poem up - it complements the content. Speaking of content, there is a lean, visceral quality to your poetry.
JoseHdz | July 4, 2011 - 22:31
thank you, kindly. very much appreciate your warm observations.
salud,
jose