Time terrifies
shakes me to the
rawest nerve
it took me
and punished
for all the past that I did wrong.
Time it runs on and on
it has this power
to cover you
immerse you
in waters, fountains
drowning you lavishly in fear.
Time emotionless
it's strength
a simple, basic
binary code
of life
an eternal rhythmic pulse.
Time wraps it's hands
around your neck
stifles any living
hope or desires
a lost contest
victorious, the devil in disguise.
Comments
fatboy74 | November 1, 2010 - 08:53
Not such a teaser this time but I really like the mystery of your poems - a 'delicious' and devilishly good denouement. :-)
Highhat | November 1, 2010 - 09:06
Time does have an immense power, time gone by, time to come- the present. I'm glad you wrote this message.
Thanks
;)Pia
Louise178 | November 1, 2010 - 09:07
Oooooh what a gorgeous word :)
shoe | November 1, 2010 - 17:47
I really like this Louise, especially these lines,
"cover you
immerse you
in waters, fountains
drowning you lavishly in fear."
and the third verse is more than good, I.M.O.:}
You are very spare with punctuation, is this intended?
Louise178 | November 1, 2010 - 18:23
Thank you shoe, yes I only use it when I really need it, bit naughty I know, but it's how I like it, it's my own personal preference, I like to see writing where there are gaps and lines dropped. Sometimes I use full punctuation, although I try not to :)I am a big Adrienne Rich fan to be honest. Ooooh to be able to write like her, would be wonderful! Thank you for your comment :)
Kahdai | November 4, 2010 - 18:28
Its amazing! :) K
Louise178 | November 4, 2010 - 18:51
That's very kind of you to say so Kahdai :)