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I really liked this Maggy, bringing your creative contemporary lens to this as you do!!!

Hi maggy,

what a brilliant piece of writing, of human emotions.
Relationships are full of ups and downs and you
write about it so brilliantly in this poem.

Great read and thanks for sharing.

Jenny.

Thanks to both of you!

Thanks for your comment Richard, hope you're well. Relationships are a lot like those ornaments. In my head they're called Newton's Balls but after googling I realised it's "Newton's Cradle" :)

When planets collide, I know the feeling well. Amazing, Maggy, as always.

Rich

Hi maggy, hope you're good. I particularly liked -

'we are both planets, when we hoped
one of us was a moon'

Very good, as always.

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Thanks both Hudson and Pesky, I appreciate your kind words as always.

And Tony, thanks for your ongoing support.

Great imagery, great lines. saw this when they posted it on facebook. I'll have to check out more of your work!

I really enjoyed this Maggy, thank you.
EB.

Great stuff, a real linguistic orgy.

Not sure I understand "tenuous rain" though...

This is fantastic, lots of lovely imagery in it, and like a lot of people it seems, I can relate to parts of it too. Thanks for sharing. :)

This is just beautiful. It has it's very own shape and colour, melancholy but tender and just...lovely.
Innes x

Yes, I like it. Maggy certainly deserves some raving from time to time: "B.B.C.'s young writer of the year" or something of the sort I recall. A real talent early on in her journey. The first and last stanzas here are incredibly strong, I think, although it might be possible to think of another metaphoric term than "bowl," like "territory," which would rhyme better as well, though perhaps "bowl" has an accurate feel to it for Maggy.

Very good. The circling planets metaphor is an effective one - just what life is like sometimes.

Rob

Pure genius. Emotive and a wonderfully different way of usage of the planet imagery. Great comments, cherry and pick of the day. Quite right too.

I am always impressed by your work Maggy but never surprised at the fine quality.

;)Pia

I am always impressed by your work Maggy but never surprised at the fine quality.

;)Pia

This has a beautiful, wise perspective. It is a poem to be read on the morning I think. Thank you for this moment of clarity!

I'm a planet. I used to be a moon, but it was rubbish..

Love it, and the planets bit at the end is inspired, utterly beautiful poem.

Maggy, you are an absolutely amazing writer!

I thnk TC's Facebook intro is bang on. You're light is definitely destined to burn brightly. I just wish I could produce stuff even half as good.

It's peppered with wonderful imagery and there isn't a line I don't like. If I had to single out a section it would be:

Our better moments come undone
by those that follow when I call you
names and you spit in my face and suddenly
that smile I love on the pier in Brighton
becomes an awkward muscular contraction
that seems to tell me:

we are both planets, when we hoped
one of us was a moon.

That's so, so good. The line ...and you spit in my face...just contrasts brilliantly with the softer emotions in the poem and brings out and adds focus in the same way that salt draws flavour.

"we are both planets, when we hoped
one of us was a moon. We orbit
and collide, time and time again
repeating mistakes in a big black bowl
wishing on a celestial fire
to set us free."

- absolutely adore the imagery in the final stanza. A beautiful tour de force, Maggy.Well done on the picks!

Magic xxx

I think more than anything Maggy you understand the natural fall of words on to page - like all my favourite poets you never seem to overrun - lines finish where they should, syllables seem almost placed - but it all feels natural. Add to that you always tell a good story. More great writing. :-)

As you've collected just about all the superlatives going, I can only add that I really enjoyed this, maggy, in fact your words seem to wrap themselves around me. Excellent!

sue