Amnesia

Congrats on a well deserved cherry, dear Rebecca.
A finely written poem.

Luigi xxx

Each time I read this, I get more from it, and you know already, which my favourite stanza is with that wonderful couple of lines:-

"I strip away my clothes - let the sand and the wind fold them as they will."

Well done, on the much deserved cherry too;-)

Tina xxx

Thank you, Luigi! Glad you enjoyed this one ;)

Magic xxx

Thank you, dear Tina! You know I love those lines just as much as you do ;) Thank you so much for looking over this one!

Magic xxx

I like this one very much Magic. Good luck with your exams btw - you must be in the middle of them now

Thank you insert! And cheers - I've had one already (3 hour History exam! *shivers*) but now I've got a bit of a wait as the rest are all crammed into the last two weeks of June! Really should be revising right now ... but ABC is much more fun ;)

Magic xxx

Well done on the cherry Magic- richly deserved in my opinion. I adore the imagery you use, especially in the last stanza and I love the last line.

I also really like these images;
"they welcome me
like a sister with their skinny, white arms."

and

"Nor is there a scattering of broken shells.
(Sharp words that should never have been uttered.)"

This is such a beautiful poem, constructed so perfectly and great use of brackets, Magic :)

Beeme xx

Thank you Beeme! I'm glad you like the brackets - it's just a new style I'm trying out at the moment!

Magic xxx

new MistakenMagic
lovely images and colours
in this fab;poem.Well done
on the well earnt cherry!
all the best with exams.
3 hours,long time.yes good
on here AbcTakes. I forget clearing up
Time flies.
julie xx

Thank you Julie! Time does indeed fly - especially when you're having fun ;)

Magic xxx

"awesome" is probably a small modest word for this one, but it's certainly the first that comes to mind

beautiful imagery throughout the poem..

a well deserved cherry..

Wow! Thank you hellbent-savage :) Glad you like this one!

Magic xxx

well written the only part I didn't like was where you said sands bad memories.you wouldn't envy the beach if the sand had bad memories/just a thought.the sins are clinging to your skin so the bad memories might as well be to.No offence meant its your poem

Hello braintrain - thank you for your comment. I see what you mean but I guess the sand/beach and the narrator are interchangeable - so the 'sand's bad memories' does refer to the bad memories of the narrator - just as the pebbles/jellyfish etc are compared to the narrator's past experiences.

The narrator envies the beach because although it had bad memories they have been washed away - just like she wants hers to be. If the sand had never had bad memories there would be no comparison - and no guarantee that the sea would be the 'amnesiac potion' - if you see what I mean!

Magic xxx

A poem which deserves more than two cherries. Not that I have anything against cherries.I like them very much.This poem deserves all the cherries in the world . Beautiful poem , helps me dream ,a dream of beauty ,is here in plenty, beautiful poem, helps me dream. Thanks

No, thank YOU Zemikael for such a lovely comment! I'm so glad you like this one - it's the first poem I've written in a while, so I'm happy I appear to be back with a bang ;)

Magic xxx

Magic xxx what do you mean by ' No,thank YOU'? but the rest of your comment is complementary.

Don't worry Zemikael - all I mean is you shouldn't be thanking me for just doing something I love - I should be the one thanking you for being so nice about the poem ;)

Magic xxx

Rather late in the day but just to add to the appreciation. I like the way it shifts back and forth (like the waves I suppose) between the outer and inner world. But especially well done to have come up with this in the midst of exams.

Rob

someone's on a cherry streak!!!
awesome.
dead awesome.

jason

Thank you, Rob! I guess poetry is a welcome distraction from revision ;)

Magic xxx

Hehe, cheers jason ;) But you know you're the truly awesome one :P

Magic xxx

Ah magic, this one really is! & very much like me. Ofcourse, any stormy day, the sea & sand have the power to gift you amnesia & wash away the rain or pain, jellyfish & sharp shell words! Kahdai xxx

Thank you Kahdai! And nice to see you around here again ;)

Magic xxx

I ent bin awe ;)!

You have such great insight to be so young! Good read!!

Thank you apeljo! Glad you enjoyed reading this ;)

Magic xxx

Hi Rebecca,

I've been away for a while and as such have missed the enrichment that your poetry brings to my life. This poem is incredible, both the concept and the way that concept is expressed.

Well done.

David xx

Hello there, David!

I realised you hadn't been around for a while and your loyal commenting on my poetry has been sorely missed I can tell you! But thank you for taking the time now ;) Glad you liked this one!

Magic xxx

I was never really a poetry fan but every time you write you give a master class makes me want to try harder

Well done again

Glad this one has inspired you, darkenwolf ;) Thanks for another wonderful comment!

Magic xxx

'twas my pleasure ;)