Dear Diary ...


from the ABC set Silver Spun Sand Poems

Dank, dark and drizzly
this November afternoon;
I break off from my scribbling
and look out my window
at the moor – thin, ribbons
of mist haphazardly rise
from a far-flung stream.

Reminds me of my half-smoked
cigarette, smouldering in an ashtray;
memory, not so hot, not these days.
Brush some wayward wisps
of grey from my eyes
and the curtain lifts
as silent as time.

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Comments

insertponceyfre... | November 8, 2010 - 12:58

love the imagery in this oneTina

Silver Spun Sand | November 8, 2010 - 13:07

Thanks, so much, insert. You are quite the 'ray of sunshine';-)

fatboy74 | November 8, 2010 - 16:30

Dark, dank and drizzly, couldn't be put better than this - well done and congrats on cherries. :-)

Silver Spun Sand | November 8, 2010 - 16:36

Fatboy, thanks so much. And it is still, dark, dank and drizzly here, unfortunately;-)

Glad you enjoyed and much appreciate your telling me.

Tina

shoe | November 8, 2010 - 18:25

Lovely imagery and mood catching, evokes those grey days we all know so well!

skinner_jennifer | November 8, 2010 - 18:33

Hi Tina,
I love the lines thin, ribbons of mist haphazardly
rise from a far-flung stream, in connection with.
Reminds me of my half-smoked cigarette, smouldering
in an ashtray, what an imagination you have.

Simply beautiful. Congratulations on the cherries.

Jenny. xxx

Silver Spun Sand | November 8, 2010 - 18:41

And it certainly IS a grey day today...in this part of the world anyway.

Glad you enjoyed and thank you for letting me know;-)

Tina

Silver Spun Sand | November 8, 2010 - 18:42

Speaking of imagination, you certainly have one that I envy too;-)

Many thanks for reading and letting me know you enjoyed.

Tina xxx

Firebird | November 9, 2010 - 08:52

This is lovely ,Tina x Really captures a moment of reflection x:)

Silver Spun Sand | November 9, 2010 - 09:55

Thank you, Firebird. Pleased you liked it;-)x

MistakenMagic | November 9, 2010 - 13:14

Concise but absolutely packed with brilliant and beautiful images, Tina! Very well done on a well-deserved cherry ;)

Magic xxx

Silver Spun Sand | November 9, 2010 - 13:23

'Concise' is exactly what I have problems with, as you know';-) but it seems to have worked in this case at least.

Glad you enjoyed and thanks for telling me;-)

Tina xxx

Highhat | November 9, 2010 - 19:20

I want to leave a comment too. Captures the November mood very well Tina- like the part about the curtain lifting as silent as time. Very well done. Hope you didn't sit with an open window you may catch a cold!!!
cheers
Pia ;)

Silver Spun Sand | November 9, 2010 - 19:47

No - I had the window tightly shut;-)

My thanks to you for your lovely comment.

Tina;-)

Kahdai | November 10, 2010 - 21:08

Great time for scribbling :) novembre, here a cold clear day today though! Your last four lines are best for me, I liked the whole thing K xx

Silver Spun Sand | November 11, 2010 - 08:40

And it is certainly 'scribbling' weather again today, Kahdai, raining, as it is, 'cats and dogs'.

Thanks for reading and glad you enjoyed;-)

Tina xx

Kahdai | November 11, 2010 - 15:33

I like that saying, it would be funny, all the lonly people could scoop up a cat or dog, take it in warm and dry and feed it :) K

SundaysChild | November 19, 2010 - 04:03

Haunting. Love the last four lines.

Silver Spun Sand | November 19, 2010 - 08:44

How good to hear from you, SundaysChild;-)

Thanks for reading, and glad you enjoyed.

Tina

kheldar | November 28, 2010 - 20:47

Great stuff

:--) xxx

Silver Spun Sand | November 29, 2010 - 10:08

As is your comment, David. Many thanks.

Tina xx