Girl with the Gypsy Earring

Vivid writing,and a good closing line.

Wow! Tina,
I've always thought that food and passion go hand
in hand, I think you've nailed it with this beautiful
poem.

Thankyou for a great read.

Jenny.

Thanks, Luly. Much appreciated;-) Tina

Many thanks, Jenny. 'If music be the food of love' and all that;-)

Tina

I agree with Luly!

one thing - in the second stanza, you've said she says "she'll catch me later" - you don't really need speech marks there - it's reported speech

Well, Tina, now I've seen another side to you. You made me feel gooey after a couple of lines. Really good eroticism. Always seems to work with food and eating. Fabulooooooooooous! I'm just off to the bathroom with a juicy peach. I thought this was really good, and there's not many things that arouse me these days. Really, really, really sexy writing. Love it! Well done and lots, lots more - pleeeeeease!

sd

Very sexy ;)

Thanks for reading, insert;-)

As to the single speech marks, I guess I only used them to denote a kind of a catch phrase, but I agree, they would seem to be rather superfluous and misleading in this case. Many thanks for your advice.

Tina

Many thanks, Sue;-) Pleased you enjoyed and hope that the peach was as juicy as anticipated;-)

Tina

Thank you, Sundays;-)

Wow - steamy stuff, Tina! Exotic and erotic...great last line.

Coral

Great one Tina... 3rd verse made me feel hungry... as for the last one... Phowwwwrrrr (not sure how that word is spelt). Super read, wanted more.

Steve
p.s. I've finally got around to writing another story about my favourite vampire - Tina Aurora.

This is amazing as usual. The ending captures the poem so well. It is a perfect poem
Dark Fox

Guess we could all do with a touch of 'steamy stuff' every now and again, Coral. Glad you enjoyed;-) Come to think of it, whilst I was writing it, I did have to demist my specs, every once in a while;-)

Tina

I think your spelling is spot on, Steve!!;-)

As for your 'Tina Aurora' shall look forward to reading it, but now I must fly, as the sun is just about to creep over that horizon, and we all know what that means;-)

Seriously though, many thanks for making me smile;-)

Tina

Dark Fox, thanks for your more than kind comment;-)

Tina

I like the metaphor- her skin smells of distant thunder- great poem Tina- enjoyed it
;)Pia

Pia - hope there is no thunder where you are today;-) Here it is really springlike. Glad you enjoyed the poem and many thanks for your lovely comment.

Tina;-)

Hot stuff... nothing is sexier than precision.

Here's my edit of the third stanza:

She deseeds juicy plum tomatoes,
seasons spaghetti with oregano -
fresh chopped on a bamboo board
and drizzled from her palm.

John - many thanks for reading.

As you say, precision is everything, and I shall sleep on it. But not before I go and put the spaghetti on the slow burner;-)

Tina

It has all been said and some - I like john shades suggestion, but don't lose the comma in the first line of third - this sensous description is like a slow undressing and needs the pause. You are a gem Tina. :-)

Well, I was reading late at night and it woke me up - powerful stuff! The last line is especially wonderful (not sure what distant thunder smells like but it's a wonderful phrase).

Rob

Thanks, fb;-)

The beauty of this site, is certainly illustrated here...with these inspired suggestions, which I shall, of course, think carefully about. True gems,
these;-)

Have a great weekend.

Tina

Rob - so sorry to have woken you up with such a jolt...but a 'nice jolt', I hope. And as to your question, haven't the foggiest idea, but as you say, who cares when it sounds good;-)

Have a great weekend, and many thanks for your words.

Tina

I agree with Pia, love the love line. Excellent writing as always, really enjoyed :)

Beeme xx