Once Upon a Time

I'll tell you which line I especially like.
". . . and you and me equalled us." and then the bread baking ". . rose and rose again"- I love seeing my bread raising in the oven- it is so satisfying. This was a perfect and romantic poem Tina- really really lovely
;)Pia

Thanks for that, Pia. I just adore making bread...you can keep all your bread-making machines. There is something so very therapeutic about kneeding the dough and watching it rise. So pleased you enjoyed this, and telling me in such a lovely way;-)

Tina

Hi Tina,

I like the idea of the title, 'the Once Upon A Time,'
It cunjures up so much sentiment, remembering times
gone by, I totally agree with Pia about those last
lines:-

Once upon a time
when we were young
and you and me
equalled us.

How much more special could you get than those words?
I also loved the line, a watermelon moon, very descriptive and completely different. Simply Beautiful.

Jenny.

Many thanks for reading this, Jenny. I guess you need a break from that writing of yours. Pleased you enjoyed;-)

Tina

Really like this one Tina, very beautiful particularly middle four stanzas. :-)

Tina - I thought this was just beautiful. It really rung bells for me and you expressed sentiments familiar to me incredibly well. You get an extra cherry from me for that.

One of your best I think, Tina.

Glad you think so, fb. Thanks, so very much;-)

Tina

OTT - what can I say, but that your cherry has that extra special flavour, all its own. Thanks so very much. Hope you have a peaceful weekend;-) Tina

I'm really pleased you think that, Coral;-) Many thanks.

Tina

I agree with Seashore, I think this is one of your best. So beautiful and romantic :)

Beeme xx

Thanks, so very much, Beeme;-)

Tina xx

I love this poem. Another of your great ones. I love the stanza about sleep being last thing on their mind. It is nice to be young and not have to worry about other things like work, money or life in general. Being lost in each other is more important.

Thank you again Tina

Dark Fox

'a vase of aquilegia
shed nightshade petals,
and your bread –
baking in the oven
rose and rose again.'

- love these lines, Tina. A poem for the senses to really play and play on the heartstrings. Well done!

Magic xxx

Dark Fox - you are more than welcome. Many thanks for reading, and for your words. You are so very right in what you say;-)

Tina

Thanks, Magic;-) You have such a lovely way of putting things.

Tina xxx

Gorgeous, Tina. Agree with all that's been said, another outstandingly beautiful and heartfelt poem of yours - thank you for such a lovely read :)

Rachel xx

I like the way this piece builds in poetic increments toward that stunning ending. Understated and undemonstrative, the poem is quite perfect.

Rachel - thanks so much, and I am so pleased that your latest poem is doing so well. It really is a gem that truly sparkles;-)

Tina xx

Barry - thanks so very much. Your comment, as always, more than illustrative and thoughtful;-)

Tina

Tina, thank you so much for that. Your kindness and sheer loveliness shine through in everything you write, and a compliment like that from a poet I admire is priceless - you're a star, and I'm ever grateful :)

All the more beautiful second time round, this is, by the way - a sparkling gem and then some, if you ask me ;o)

Thanks again, for both the read and the encouragement,

Rachel xx

Your words mean a lot, Rachel. Just keep writing, that is thanks enough;-)Tina