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You do seem to be able to
Posted on Mon, 05 Oct 2015
You do seem to be able to describe his thinking very naturally, and his observations, looking into the water, noticing the small life, and drifting into imaginations.
Then suddenly the tensions, mirrored a bit by his grandad's tensions. It...
Posted in Jake Mutant - Chapter Four
Welcome, you are new here,
Posted on Thu, 27 Aug 2015
Welcome, you are new here, aren't you? You've drawn out an interesting and tender theme here.
I liked the thoughtfulness of 'As the passion that they share Crescendos with great care.'
Personally I would have liked a...Read full comment
Posted in The Embrace
This reminded me of when my
Posted on Wed, 07 Jan 2015
This reminded me of when my son was being taught about the 'rules of composition' for music, and I worried he would lose what seemed to be spontaneous and individual intuition for what would make interesting sound. He assured me it wouldn't, but...Read full comment
Posted in The Discovered Unartist
Trying to see where you're
Posted on Thu, 18 Dec 2014
Trying to see where you're coming from in this, PT. It's because of the suffering, death, sin, that God is doing something. I know we would like him to sort it all out at ths moment, but just like the prophecies concerning his first...Read full comment
Posted in Broken Faith
Stephen, I don't manage to
Posted on Thu, 11 Dec 2014
Stephen, I don't manage to dip much into the prose section, and horror and surreal isn't really my scene – I didn't even like 'Alice in Wonderland' as a child! However I did find reading this intriguing for the well-structured brevity, and the...Read full comment
Posted in Shadow Cooking
Thanks, I appreciate your
Posted on Mon, 15 Sep 2014
Thanks, I appreciate your interest at analysis, Stephen. My background is Welsh and Welsh poetry which makes a lot of use of repetition of consonants or part words to form unbotrusive patterns to help the impact of verse. (In its technical...Read full comment
Posted in No Ties (IP)
Oh, do plant a willow tree,
Posted on Wed, 03 Feb 2016
Oh, do plant a willow tree, Terry, whoever it weeps for!
As usual you paint a full and interesting picture, full of interesting musical rhymes.
I think we can take some encouragement from some of the 'cleanings-up' that have been done...
Posted in A Willow Tree
I liked the title, but it
Posted on Sat, 23 Jan 2016
I liked the title, but it also reminded me of the power/danger of words written down [Make me a beauty; ugly monster; object of hate; Angel of Death.] which, unless 'fed to the flame', can backfire, as proved by the...Read full comment
Posted in A4
But oh, to have those
Posted on Sun, 17 Jan 2016
But oh, to have those memories! A richness not all own.
I was struck by mountains...marathons, and molehills – to thinking things that are molehills to some, can be mountains or marathons to another. RhiannonRead full comment
Posted in Mad Man Moon