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I don't know do I

Posted by Highhat on November 13, 2010 - 17:34

I don't mind them playing the bagpipes while I am thinking
Am just wondering if the grass is greener
I really don't think it is
although would be nice if it gets a bit better
than all this thinking
and wondering
It's got to be a bit better than this
drunk,intoxicated, under the influence
drugs, booze, cigarettes
murky sunsets
and lost loves
people falling
and dying before
you know what it is all about
when will you know
tomorrow
never comes
let the future come of it's own
just don't fancy the thought
of leaving everything behind
were I to move forward
into another dimension
just wondering what it really is
this thing they call eternity
I just don't know do I

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insertponceyfre... | November 13, 2010 - 18:14

I really like this Pia - especially the first half - great title!

Silver Spun Sand | November 13, 2010 - 19:13

I admire your style in this one, Pia. The absence of punctuation adds a starkness which suits it well.

Tina

Highhat | November 13, 2010 - 19:21

So glad for your feedback Insert Thank you very much. I am glad you enjoyed
;)Pia

Highhat | November 13, 2010 - 19:22

Thanks Tina for your comment. Much appreciated
;)Pia

skinner_jennifer | November 14, 2010 - 03:13

This is a very deep and meaningful peace Pia, you
have excelled yourself.
Jenny.

Highhat | November 14, 2010 - 09:58

Thank you Jenny. I am glad you got the deep part of it. Thank you for the read and comment. Much appreciated
;)Pia

shoe | November 14, 2010 - 12:01

A very thought provoking poem, I especially like the opening line!

Highhat | November 14, 2010 - 13:04

Thank you
;)Pia

seashore | November 15, 2010 - 15:55

Yes this speaks to me!

Highhat | November 15, 2010 - 18:59

Why I am glad for that seashore. Thank you for reading and leaving a comment. Much appreciated
;)Pia

Kahdai | November 16, 2010 - 20:22

This is fantastic Pia! I could call most of it my favourite part ;) K x

Highhat | November 16, 2010 - 20:54

Thanks Kahdai- lovely comment. Much appreciated
;)Pia

fatboy74 | November 18, 2010 - 00:54

Loved the middle section to this Pia - a breathless read suited to the subject and the minds wandering.
:-)

Highhat | November 18, 2010 - 10:12

Thanks for the comment Fatboy.Much appreciate you reading my work. Glad you enjoyed ;)
;)Pia