My son my sun

Cherry

By Highhat

Sun, 10 Oct 2010
  • 3406 reads
31 comments
 

I always think I have had enough
And then the tables
Turn on me again

3 lovers have left this
Earth for a better
Place

And I think I have had enough
When the sun of my life
And my favourite angel
Comes visiting

We dine and joke and do the
Cleaning
Washing
At my home and his
My son is all I have

And that is sufficient
Because he is thankful
I am thankful
That the bad times
Have turned to good

We go on hoping that
It will continue
To be a blessed time

A blessed time

For both of us

Certificate U
Poem
Autobiography

Comments

Submitted by insertponceyfre... on
I think the repetition works well in this poem, as does the simplicity - this is beautiful pia

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Pia, you have produced a beautiful, honest piece of work here, you should be very proud of yourself. Jenny.

 

Submitted by Highhat on
Thank you Insert- much appreciated ;)pia

Submitted by Highhat on
Jenny- I am proud of my son for being so good at taking care of himself- and me!! But thank you very much for your very kind comment- and thank you for reading cheers ;)pia

Submitted by shoe on
This is so lovely, I especially like the first verse, in a few words you have captured a world, the love shines out of this piece.

 

Submitted by Highhat on
Thanks shoe- for reading and commenting ;)pia

Submitted by Highhat on
Got a cherry- gee thanks. I bet my son will be glad when I show him this piece ;)pia

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
I am so pleased for you, the cherries are well deserved, I bet your son will be proud of you.

 

Submitted by Highhat on
i'm very proud, and i think "My Sun" fits so well, because my mom has always drawn the 'O' in my name like a sun.. /Oskar

Submitted by Highhat on
Thanks a lot Jenny- you are so kind ;)pia

Submitted by fatboy74 on
congrats on cherry Pia - never east to write about your own children and make it work as a poem but you have done it very well. :-)

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
A gem of a poem, pia. Well done on the much deserved cherry;-) Tina

 

Submitted by Highhat on
Fatboy- thank you for your kind comment ;)pia

Submitted by Highhat on
Thanks a lot Tina- I'm glad you enjoyed it ;)pia I'm really glad for the cherry

Submitted by Louise178 on
Succinct, simple, special, sensational, beautiful, I nearly cried! xxxxx

Louise

Submitted by Highhat on
that was a helluva lot of s's- thanks a lot- I really appreciate you reading Jackie and thank you for the beautiful comment. A great reward on par with the cherry ;)pia

Submitted by Kahdai on
Aaw Pia,! its so lovely! my mama had a song, my only sunshine, it made me think of it to your son, Oskar its so nice of you to comment on here too, its great that you got cherries for it! K x

"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "

Submitted by Highhat on
That is a very kind comment Kahdai- I - we really appreciate it. How nice that your mama had a lovely song for you to listen to. ;)pia

Submitted by Kahdai on
Yes now I think of it she had a few different songs to me and my brothers I wonder if she mae them up? Ooh look youv got me in a pondering wondering wandering now!

"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "

Submitted by Highhat on
Good when the good memories come to you Kahdai- you see if you can remember some more songs. I used to make up songs for my sons when they were babies ;)pia

Submitted by Kahdai on
maybe write them to abc if you remember? like I believe songs come from emotions so thats great!

"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "

Submitted by Highhat on
Yes I remember something about a cottage in the forest and so on- but I have forgotten them :( it's so long ago and I couldn't sing very well but it made them go to sleep. ;)

Submitted by Kahdai on
sounds lovely anyway :)

"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "

Submitted by smokejack on
'walnuts are the enemy' This is a heartfelt piece full of warmth and eloquence.

Submitted by Highhat on
thank you Mr Walnut foe ;)

Submitted by maggyvaneijk on
a neat, simple and beautiful poem that perfectly says all it needs to say without any frills. I admire the honesty too.

 

Submitted by Highhat on
Thank you Maggy for reading and commenting. Much appreciated ;)Pia

Submitted by seashore on
Just stumbled across this. The simplicity of the writing makes it all the more poignant. Lovely.

Submitted by Highhat on
thanks seashore ;)

Submitted by danrama on
Bittersweet I loved it Dan

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