My son my sun

I think the repetition works well in this poem, as does the simplicity - this is beautiful pia

Hi Pia,
you have produced a beautiful, honest piece of work
here, you should be very proud of yourself.
Jenny.

Thank you Insert- much appreciated
;)pia

Jenny- I am proud of my son for being so good at taking care of himself- and me!! But thank you very much for your very kind comment- and thank you for reading
cheers
;)pia

This is so lovely, I especially like the first verse, in a few words you have captured a world, the love shines out of this piece.

Thanks shoe- for reading and commenting
;)pia

Got a cherry- gee thanks. I bet my son will be glad when I show him this piece ;)pia

I am so pleased for you, the cherries are well
deserved, I bet your son will be proud of you.

i'm very proud, and i think "My Sun" fits so well, because my mom has always drawn the 'O' in my name like a sun..
/Oskar

Thanks a lot Jenny- you are so kind
;)pia

congrats on cherry Pia - never east to write about your own children and make it work as a poem but you have done it very well. :-)

A gem of a poem, pia. Well done on the much deserved cherry;-)

Tina

Fatboy- thank you for your kind comment
;)pia

Thanks a lot Tina- I'm glad you enjoyed it
;)pia
I'm really glad for the cherry

Succinct, simple, special, sensational, beautiful, I nearly cried! xxxxx

that was a helluva lot of s's- thanks a lot- I really appreciate you reading Jackie and thank you for the beautiful comment. A great reward on par with the cherry
;)pia

Aaw Pia,! its so lovely! my mama had a song, my only sunshine, it made me think of it to your son, Oskar its so nice of you to comment on here too, its great that you got cherries for it! K x

That is a very kind comment Kahdai- I - we really appreciate it. How nice that your mama had a lovely song for you to listen to.
;)pia

Yes now I think of it she had a few different songs to me and my brothers I wonder if she mae them up? Ooh look youv got me in a pondering wondering wandering now!

Good when the good memories come to you Kahdai- you see if you can remember some more songs. I used to make up songs for my sons when they were babies
;)pia

maybe write them to abc if you remember? like I believe songs come from emotions so thats great!

Yes I remember something about a cottage in the forest and so on- but I have forgotten them :( it's so long ago and I couldn't sing very well but it made them go to sleep.
;)

sounds lovely anyway :)

'walnuts are the enemy'

This is a heartfelt piece full of warmth and eloquence.

thank you Mr Walnut foe
;)

a neat, simple and beautiful poem that perfectly says all it needs to say without any frills. I admire the honesty too.

Thank you Maggy for reading and commenting. Much appreciated
;)Pia

Just stumbled across this. The simplicity of the writing makes it all the more poignant. Lovely.

thanks seashore ;)

Bittersweet
I loved it

Dan

thanks Dan my son is the true angel on earth
;)Pia