I'll be here,
not coping as well as you-
you always do,
-with all our pains inside me,
I tried to take from you.
No dragonflies wingspans touch
my same span outstretched arms,
they fly above in fear of my wild cries.
Then the air,
air of thick, green forest,
cools,
darkness covers my sore eyes.
Only the sunlight through the leaves
tries to reach here,
trying so hard to reach me,
to beam some hope
into shutting hearts,
not here, I put myself here,
looking down deeper,
hear no comfort around me
hands cover my sad eyes
holding back tears and sighs.
Dipped my toes into
that damn deep dark lake again,
that is so hard to pull myself out from,
let me breath again.
Comments
Beeme | January 26, 2011 - 21:22
This is so beautiful Kahdai! Stunning and so emotive, I don't think I can explain how much I enjoyed this! It's amazing to me.
Beeme xx
Kahdai | January 26, 2011 - 22:05
Thanks Beeme, am so glad! ^^ xx K
fatboy74 | January 26, 2011 - 22:24
Kahdai this is absolutely my favourite of yours - really well done! :-)
seashore | January 27, 2011 - 05:12
I agree with Beeme - very emotive.
Kahdai | January 27, 2011 - 11:53
:D Yay! Thankyou fatboy :-) and seashore x x K I might write a second part to this soon...
ScoZen | January 27, 2011 - 17:28
ScoZen
Enjoyed this.
Perhaps you should swim in Jennifer's pond instead of "...that damn deep dark lake again..."
Regards
skinner_jennifer | January 27, 2011 - 17:52
Hi Kahdai,
I love the fourth stanza:-
Only the sunlight through the leaves
tries to reach here,
trying so hard to reach me,
to beam some hope
into shutting hearts,
not here, I put myself here,
looking down deeper,
hear no comfort around me
hands cover my sad eyes
holding back tears and sighs.
I found this very emotional to read.
Thankyou for a lovely poem.
Jenny.
Kahdai | February 4, 2011 - 11:30
Thankyou both! Where do I find this pond? Jenny are welcome, am very glad :) x K
Highhat | February 11, 2011 - 09:07
Yes very beautiful and emotive- a dark shady atmosphere.
;)Pia
Kahdai | February 17, 2011 - 22:07
thankyou Pia :) and yay another good cherry one!