Creative Writing Dissertation option - work in progress

I am writing an allegorical piece based losely on Spenser's 'The Faerie Queene', taking elements of his allegorical narrative/characters, as well as influence from the epic and medieval romance, but it has a modern twist. It's a real work in progress but I am having trouble with the level of allegory in it. Just some comments on if you have a clue what's going on underneath the literal story would be really helpful or any other comments would be greatly appreciated. (I don't really consider myself a writer - this is truly an experiement!!!) As I am restricted by the word count of my disseration below are a mixture of excerpts and summaries of the plot.