I cannot over stress the importance of commenting on other writers' work. The benefits aren't just the obvious ones of providing feedback and recieving reciprocal comments yourself. The hidden benefit is that your own writing standard will...
Not at all, but you don't want repetition. In the second line you have the word "air" twice and only five words apart. The fourth line has "with every" twice, once again only a few words apart. It may seem petty but these are the things that stop...
I really enjoyed reading this, it brought to life a typical suprmarket shift complete with misery and the type of characters which seem to crop up in most workplaces. It recall my own stint in 'provisions', I got a verbal warning for failing to...
Thank you for this, Kevin. I have a copy of Bound for Glory on my nightstand. (Do read Woody Guthrie: A Life by Joe Klein.) Still trying to find a footing after great loss. You lose your sense of self and wonder if you'll ever get it back. Those...
Hi, Jay. I agree with Elsie here. I've read a few of your pieces and it seems to me that these are your personal views (I apoligise if I've misunderstood). These are questions being asked ever increasingly in England, as well as the rest of the U...
Well if this is your first poem you've got real potential as your experience and practise grows. I really quite like this piece although romance poetry is not something that I would actively seek out. A couple of observations if I may?
i can't understand the first para... there seems to be lots of typos:
Josh rubbed his three day stubble and looked turned towards Lyn, who smiled sternly.
The kids were being noisy and the traffic was heavy. A combination...
I liked this a lot. The voice of your narrator was well-expressed. I felt like I could hear her speaking as I read. Your diction is absolutely on point and the content of the story gave me a window into her world.
By scratch
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Posted on Wed, 06 Aug 2014
I cannot over stress the importance of commenting on other writers' work. The benefits aren't just the obvious ones of providing feedback and recieving reciprocal comments yourself. The hidden benefit is that your own writing standard will...
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By jolono
Not at all, but you don't
Posted on Mon, 31 Aug 2015
Not at all, but you don't want repetition. In the second line you have the word "air" twice and only five words apart. The fourth line has "with every" twice, once again only a few words apart. It may seem petty but these are the things that stop...
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By Aaron Stewart
Came for crying tree stayed
Posted on Mon, 17 Aug 2015
Came for crying tree stayed for hard drugs. 8/8
Welcome to the site, you can't leave.
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By prettyrose
Oh Tina, So heart wrenching, :)
Posted on Thu, 03 Apr 2014
Oh Tina, This is such a powerful, beautiful, well expressed poem, yet heart...
Read full commentPosted in Today I Wrote a Poem
By Jane Hyphen
I really enjoyed reading this
Posted on Wed, 26 Sep 2018
I really enjoyed reading this, it brought to life a typical suprmarket shift complete with misery and the type of characters which seem to crop up in most workplaces. It recall my own stint in 'provisions', I got a verbal warning for failing to...
Read full commentPosted in Rolling in the Aisles
By hudsonmoon
Thank you for this, Kevin. I
Posted on Mon, 07 Aug 2017
Thank you for this, Kevin. I have a copy of Bound for Glory on my nightstand. (Do read Woody Guthrie: A Life by Joe Klein.) Still trying to find a footing after great loss. You lose your sense of self and wonder if you'll ever get it back. Those...
Read full commentPosted in You, me and Woody Guthrie
By Michael Valentine
Hi, Jay. I agree with Elsie
Posted on Fri, 05 Dec 2014
Hi, Jay. I agree with Elsie here. I've read a few of your pieces and it seems to me that these are your personal views (I apoligise if I've misunderstood). These are questions being asked ever increasingly in England, as well as the rest of the U...
Read full commentPosted in WHAT'S GOING ON IN OUR COUNTRY?
By scratch
Good
Posted on Sat, 15 Aug 2015
Well if this is your first poem you've got real potential as your experience and practise grows. I really quite like this piece although romance poetry is not something that I would actively seek out. A couple of observations if I may?
...
Read full commentPosted in first poem not great
By blackjack-davey
i can't understand the first
Posted on Tue, 11 Aug 2015
i can't understand the first para... there seems to be lots of typos:
Josh rubbed his three day stubble and looked turned towards Lyn, who smiled sternly.
Read full commentThe kids were being noisy and the traffic was heavy. A combination...
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By 60units
I liked this a lot. The voice
Posted on Mon, 10 Aug 2015
I liked this a lot. The voice of your narrator was well-expressed. I felt like I could hear her speaking as I read. Your diction is absolutely on point and the content of the story gave me a window into her world.
If I were to...
Read full commentPosted in A Little Tart
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