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Posted on Wed, 06 Aug 2014

I cannot over stress the importance of commenting on other writers' work.  The benefits aren't just the obvious ones of providing feedback and recieving reciprocal comments yourself.  The hidden benefit is that your own writing standard will...

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Posted in Dust

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Not at all, but you don't

Posted on Mon, 31 Aug 2015

Not at all, but you don't want repetition. In the second line you have the word "air" twice and only five words apart. The fourth line has "with every" twice, once again only a few words apart. It may seem petty but these are the things that stop...

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Posted in Chapter 2: Gone (John)

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Came for crying tree stayed

Posted on Mon, 17 Aug 2015

Came for crying tree stayed for hard drugs. 8/8

Welcome to the site, you can't leave.

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Posted in Weeping Willow

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Oh Tina, So heart wrenching, :)

Posted on Thu, 03 Apr 2014

smileyOh Tina, This is such a powerful, beautiful, well expressed poem, yet heart...

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Posted in Today I Wrote a Poem

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Wow! Keansburg, NJ- Your

Posted on Fri, 27 Sep 2019

Wow! Keansburg, NJ- Your story brought me there too and since I've also been there, it was extra special fun for me to visit it again in your words. If I remember correctly, from the boardwalk you could see the Manhattan skyline and the...

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Posted in Life and Death Under the Hudson

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Good to read this train of thought,

Posted on Fri, 15 Feb 2019

I was thinking about writing a bit of a ramble about a totally different subject, but reading this brought familiar thoughts and also some nice memories of my Las Palmas and Lanz. days. Eight years away from Spain punctuated by occasional trips...

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Posted in Among friends

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tragic, like you I don't have

Posted on Sat, 01 Dec 2018

tragic, like you I don't have an answer. Poverty, not morals is the key. We use the latter as a scapegoat, a standared practice by, for example, Jenhovah Witnesses to get a foot in the door, is to say how much worse the world is getting. They've...

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Posted in When Death Comes Too Soon

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I really enjoyed reading this

Posted on Tue, 30 Oct 2018

I really enjoyed reading this because off the brilliant descriptive prose.it also was making me think on different levels clearly the literate short story as it stands then is almost like a bit of george orwell inspired making me think socio...

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Posted in The Empathy Files. The Angel of Empathy (1)

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I really enjoyed reading this

Posted on Wed, 26 Sep 2018

I really enjoyed reading this, it brought to life a typical suprmarket shift complete with misery and the type of characters which seem to crop up in most workplaces. It recall my own stint in 'provisions', I got a verbal warning for failing to...

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Posted in Rolling in the Aisles

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Thank you for this, Kevin. I

Posted on Mon, 07 Aug 2017

Thank you for this, Kevin. I have a copy of Bound for Glory on my nightstand. (Do read Woody Guthrie: A Life by Joe Klein.) Still trying to find a footing after great loss. You lose your sense of self and wonder if you'll ever get it back. Those...

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Posted in You, me and Woody Guthrie

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