Great feedback

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Posted on Wed, 06 Aug 2014

I cannot over stress the importance of commenting on other writers' work.  The benefits aren't just the obvious ones of providing feedback and recieving reciprocal comments yourself.  The hidden benefit is that your own writing standard will...

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Posted in Dust

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Not at all, but you don't

Posted on Mon, 31 Aug 2015

Not at all, but you don't want repetition. In the second line you have the word "air" twice and only five words apart. The fourth line has "with every" twice, once again only a few words apart. It may seem petty but these are the things that stop...

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Posted in Chapter 2: Gone (John)

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Came for crying tree stayed

Posted on Mon, 17 Aug 2015

Came for crying tree stayed for hard drugs. 8/8

Welcome to the site, you can't leave.

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Posted in Weeping Willow

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Oh Tina, So heart wrenching, :)

Posted on Thu, 03 Apr 2014

smileyOh Tina, This is such a powerful, beautiful, well expressed poem, yet heart...

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Posted in Today I Wrote a Poem

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Hi Paul

Posted on Tue, 14 Sep 2021

Hi Paul

What a beatuifully thought uot and written story. The details make it so believeable and the reader is anxious to find out what is going to happen. And the end sequence was again believeable. I really enjoyed reading it.

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Posted in With or Without You

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I liked this one

Posted on Tue, 03 Aug 2021

very much. You've a good eye for small town life. I knew lots of Bindys when I was that age. It was funny when they came back, they looked the same but they were very different. I never really understood it until I joined the RAF at 21 and went...

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Posted in Death of a Power Station

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I know nothing at all about

Posted on Wed, 28 Apr 2021

I know nothing at all about Tarkovsky. (I thought he was a right back for Everton) Super poem that makes me wanna look Tarkovsky's work up.

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Posted in Conversations About Tarkovsky in a Copenhagen Restaurant

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I'm so sorry to hear this. 

Posted on Thu, 14 Jan 2021

I'm so sorry to hear this.  And this site is here to be supportive when you need it.  

It sounds as though you are spending so much emotional energy trying to forgive and understand your father, but please think about prioritising yourself...

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Posted in How do you forgive a parent?

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Possibly..

Posted on Sat, 09 Nov 2019

...the most memorable and resonating piece I've read this year. Your ability to bring sense of place, immediacy of actions and effect within a context of past events are skilfully controlled and enviable, you never let the narrative run away from...

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Posted in Trees on the Arapuni Road

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Wow! Keansburg, NJ- Your

Posted on Fri, 27 Sep 2019

Wow! Keansburg, NJ- Your story brought me there too and since I've also been there, it was extra special fun for me to visit it again in your words. If I remember correctly, from the boardwalk you could see the Manhattan skyline and the...

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Posted in Life and Death Under the Hudson

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