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Posted on Wed, 06 Aug 2014

I cannot over stress the importance of commenting on other writers' work.  The benefits aren't just the obvious ones of providing feedback and recieving reciprocal comments yourself.  The hidden benefit is that your own writing standard will...

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Posted in Dust

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A topic very close to my

Posted on Mon, 06 Dec 2021

A topic very close to my heart very well elaborated with skilled writing and fine rhyming, highlighting the concern we all feel, Turlough. Thanks for sharing your thoughts.

 

Best, Luigi

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Posted in Copse and Robbers

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Not at all, but you don't

Posted on Mon, 31 Aug 2015

Not at all, but you don't want repetition. In the second line you have the word "air" twice and only five words apart. The fourth line has "with every" twice, once again only a few words apart. It may seem petty but these are the things that stop...

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Posted in Chapter 2: Gone (John)

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Came for crying tree stayed

Posted on Mon, 17 Aug 2015

Came for crying tree stayed for hard drugs. 8/8

Welcome to the site, you can't leave.

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Posted in Weeping Willow

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Oh Tina, So heart wrenching, :)

Posted on Thu, 03 Apr 2014

smileyOh Tina, This is such a powerful, beautiful, well expressed poem, yet heart...

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Posted in Today I Wrote a Poem

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We used to look forward to

Posted on Mon, 09 May 2022

The Day of Victory celebrations every year at Teufelsberg, (West Berlin Listening Post) because it meant there was no operational flying by AFGSFG The Air Force of the Group of Forces Germany, which was what NATO named the Soviet Air Force(s) in...

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Posted in A Final Message From Moscow

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This is so powerful

Posted on Mon, 14 Mar 2022

I completely feel that sense of not belonging you describe. It's like we feel it regardless. We feel it when we live in our own curated, urban communities, and long for a simpler, slower life, more connected to nature. And when in nature, we want...

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Posted in This Cannot Be Our Home

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Thank you Insert. I find the

Posted on Mon, 14 Mar 2022

Thank you Insert. I find the weekly IP a good inspiration. We are fascinated and frightened by the idea that aliens might invade and destroy Earth but are we just talking about ourselves?

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Posted in This Cannot Be Our Home

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Hi Paul

Posted on Tue, 14 Sep 2021

Hi Paul

What a beatuifully thought uot and written story. The details make it so believeable and the reader is anxious to find out what is going to happen. And the end sequence was again believeable. I really enjoyed reading it.

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Posted in With or Without You

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I liked this one

Posted on Tue, 03 Aug 2021

very much. You've a good eye for small town life. I knew lots of Bindys when I was that age. It was funny when they came back, they looked the same but they were very different. I never really understood it until I joined the RAF at 21 and went...

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Posted in Death of a Power Station

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