Great feedback

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I really enjoyed reading this

Posted on Tue, 30 Oct 2018

I really enjoyed reading this because off the brilliant descriptive prose.it also was making me think on different levels clearly the literate short story as it stands then is almost like a bit of george orwell inspired making me think socio...

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Posted in The Empathy Files. The Angel of Empathy (1)

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I really enjoyed reading this

Posted on Wed, 26 Sep 2018

I really enjoyed reading this, it brought to life a typical suprmarket shift complete with misery and the type of characters which seem to crop up in most workplaces. It recall my own stint in 'provisions', I got a verbal warning for failing to...

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Posted in Rolling in the Aisles

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Thank you for this, Kevin. I

Posted on Mon, 07 Aug 2017

Thank you for this, Kevin. I have a copy of Bound for Glory on my nightstand. (Do read Woody Guthrie: A Life by Joe Klein.) Still trying to find a footing after great loss. You lose your sense of self and wonder if you'll ever get it back. Those...

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Posted in You, me and Woody Guthrie

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Hi, Jay. I agree with Elsie

Posted on Fri, 05 Dec 2014

Hi, Jay. I agree with Elsie here. I've read a few of your pieces and it seems to me that these are your personal views (I apoligise if I've misunderstood). These are questions being asked ever increasingly in England, as well as the rest of the U...

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Posted in WHAT'S GOING ON IN OUR COUNTRY?

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A gorgeous study of nature.

Posted on Fri, 22 Apr 2016

A glorious study of nature.

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Posted in Where the Bee Sucks

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Good

Posted on Sat, 15 Aug 2015

Well if this is your first poem you've got real potential as your experience and practise grows. I really quite like this piece although romance poetry is not something that I would actively seek out.  A couple of observations if I may?

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Posted in first poem not great

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i can't understand the first

Posted on Tue, 11 Aug 2015

i can't understand the first para... there seems to be lots of typos:

Josh rubbed his three day stubble and  looked turned towards Lyn, who smiled sternly.
The kids were being noisy and the traffic was heavy.  A combination...

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Posted in Whistle on the wynd part 1

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I liked this a lot. The voice

Posted on Mon, 10 Aug 2015

I liked this a lot. The voice of your narrator was well-expressed. I felt like I could hear her speaking as I read. Your diction is absolutely on point and the content of the story gave me a window into her world.

 

If I were to...

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Posted in A Little Tart

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This had a wonderful flow.

Posted on Tue, 05 May 2015

This had a wonderful flow. Should be read aloud on the steps of the world's libraries. As a matter of fact. I'm passing by the New York Public Library. I'll print out a few copies and leave it with the lions.

Rch

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Posted in Banned Books

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captured these moments with

Posted on Wed, 14 Jan 2015

captured these moments with lovely, delicate subtle word combinations...lines like reaching through the drivers door/to conjure up a metallic scraping/until the engine bubbled into life/like a mountain spring bottling these little cameos, as you...

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Posted in The Mechanic

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