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I have 187 stories published in 9 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 208685 times and 99 of my stories have been cherry picked.
18 of my 141 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 18 votes

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Drew Gummerson

Author of Me and Mickie James (Jonathan Cape) and The Lodger (GMP), and many stories here and there. Follow me at @drewgum

My stories

Cherry

Seven Nights at the Flamingo Hotel. (Thursday morning. Before you awake. A One Hundred Per Cent Homosexual Experience.)

You have had one a hundred per cent homosexual experience in your life. You are twenty-five and you are living in a bedsit in which there is damp on...
Cherry

Seven Nights at the Flamingo Hotel (Wednesday evening. The Man in the Pink Suit. With a Bum on his Face.)

But alcohol is not your friend. The triples from The Commodore Club have made you drunk and when the assistant in the clothes shop holds up the suit...
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Cherry

Seven Nights at the Flamingo Hotel (Wednesday afternoon. Morse Bum.)

A baby in a pushchair outside a café eyes you wearily. An old lady sits by the side of the fountain. She has a walking stick with a lump of rubber on...
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Cherry

Seven Nights At The Flamingo Hotel. (Wednesday morning. FAME!)

It is 515. The digits click. The alarm whines and after a moment the radio kicks in. The day is going to be blustery with some showers. A small child...

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18 of my comments have received 18 Great Feedback votes

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Thank you. And now that makes

Posted on Sun, 17 Nov 2019

Thank you. And now that makes perfect sense. 

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Posted in A Jewel

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I love this. 

Posted on Sun, 17 Nov 2019

I love this. 
But what is Kennabi?

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Posted in A Jewel

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I agree. I like these kind of

Posted on Thu, 14 Nov 2019

I agree. I like these kind of memory pieces. However, and it's just my opinion, I didn't like the '...'. I don't think you needed them. 
 
'Sisters are great but there are times in certain adolescent years that older sisters can view...

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Posted in Rockefeller Center Babysitting Service

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I agree. Like the movement

Posted on Thu, 14 Nov 2019

I agree. Like the movement between the images and also the final two lines. 
 

A couple of things. I can't see how a 'car slams shut'. 'a car door slams, shut, cocoons...'

 

What's 'bouguet'? Do you mean bouquet? 

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Posted in layers

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I love the setting. 

Posted on Tue, 12 Nov 2019

I love the setting. 
 

Just an opinion. 
 

I'd change the structure. So you have verses of 5, 3, 3, 5. The first 2 verses I'd leave. 'a soubrette I had met' can go and the third line, 'a dancer from the Moulin Rouge'....

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Posted in Godot

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Love it Mark. And miserably

Posted on Tue, 12 Nov 2019

Love it Mark. And miserably funny too. 

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Posted in Shrinkage

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Yes, I like this a lot. But I

Posted on Sat, 09 Nov 2019

Yes, I like this a lot. But I don't know that the words 'grudgingly' and 'innocently' fit. Because then it's an opinion of what you see and not what you see. But that's just my opinion. WCW is an imagist? Right? 

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Posted in By Lendal Bridge

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Paragraph 3 you start, One

Posted on Fri, 08 Nov 2019

Paragraph 3 you start, One day....  The next section starts, 'On one occasion...'

 

Section 16 starts 'One day...'

Later on you've got, 'One evening after school.'

 

I'd make the time references more specific,...

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Posted in Lost Dog 15-17

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I like the contrast between

Posted on Thu, 07 Nov 2019

I like the contrast between civilisation and nature, and it's all from the boy's POV so he can describe but doesn't know what's going on. We do. 
 
The last line I don't think you need. You've shown perfectly well it's a nightmare so...

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Posted in Lost Dog 11-14

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Still enjoying this. There's

Posted on Thu, 07 Nov 2019

Still enjoying this. There's a growing tension to it. 
 

It reminds me somewhat of David Vann's Legend of a Suicide- another father and son story in the wilderness. 

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Posted in Lost Dog 7-10

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