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I have 222 stories published in 10 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 245338 times and 151 of my stories have been cherry picked.
180 of my 1,097 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 190 votes

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Drew Gummerson

Author of Me and Mickie James (Jonathan Cape) and The Lodger (GMP), and many stories here and there. Follow me at @drewgum. Seven Nights At The Flamingo Hotel is coming November 2020. Pre-order here https://www.beardedbadgerpublishing.com/online-store

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Sven Goes to War. Part 8. The Boogie Woogie Bugle Boy

Sven left for Basic Training with a rucksack stuffed with items from Delicious Gifts ; a stick of Happy Holidays rock (12p), a willy warmer with his...
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Sven Goes to War. Part 7. Pictures of You.

Dearest Sven, Our Captain, Welshman from Caerphilly. His grandfather, piccolo player in 47 th grenadiers, killed by stampeding elephant in time of...
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Cherry

Sven Goes to War. Part 6. Dress You Up

On the last day of The Swiss Card Sharp Summer School Stanley and Sven threw caution to the wind, what are they going to do, throw us out on our...
Cherry

Sven Goes to War. Part 5. Come on Stanley.

Arriving seven days after all the other boys due to helping his da out with the welding on the fleet of Evans’ Sausage and Pie vans, why do they...
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Sven Goes to War. Part 4. The Card Sharks.

The Card Sharks. Each morning there was a klaxon which woke them from their bunks, then a roll call on the former prison yard, then six hours of card...

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180 of my comments have received 190 Great Feedback votes

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It is beautiful. I didn't

Posted on Thu, 23 Jul 2020

It is beautiful. I didn't know what 'ouzel' meant. It's a lovely word. 

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Posted in Love is a Labour

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It's really good. I read it

Posted on Thu, 23 Jul 2020

It's really good. I read it before. I'd put the year in the first line. You're writing in the present tense and so I'd make it clear it's not now. In the first paragraph, if you have, 'you know' do you need a question mark after States? I think...

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Posted in From Jester To King (Opening - EDITED)

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Yes, I thought that. As part

Posted on Mon, 13 Jul 2020

Yes, I thought that. As part of a longer piece it'd be fine. I was just thinking, stand alone, the opening is a bit long. Having posted longer work on here it made me really think, does this piece work alone? And that was really helpful. Because...

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Posted in The Careers Teacher

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I think it's great from,

Posted on Mon, 13 Jul 2020

I think it's great from, 'Darren walked to the stairwell...'. The tone of it is different from there, completely in his head. I think you need a new first line. In my opinion, because it's a short story and everything has to count. Asking for...

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Posted in The Careers Teacher

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It's a character. I see that.

Posted on Tue, 07 Jul 2020

It's a character. I see that. And it is how a lot of people talk. But we need to know why he's not let on the  tube. 'After the incident with the French horn, the poodle and the can of WD40 Charlie gave me down the pub they wouldn't even let me...

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Posted in Not too Much to Ask

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So sorry to hear that x 

Posted on Sun, 07 Jun 2020

So sorry to hear that x 

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Posted in Iriecat

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Loved both it and the video.

Posted on Sun, 05 Jul 2020

Loved both it and the video. 'apologies of bees' is lovely. 

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Posted in Bee eaters

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Brilliant. Loved it. And what

Posted on Sun, 28 Jun 2020

Brilliant. Loved it. And what a great idea. National Insect Week.  

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Posted in Bluebottle

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As Celticman said, good story

Posted on Wed, 24 Jun 2020

As Celticman said, good story. I think you need to build up the voodoo element, introduce it more slowly. How did he know about voodoo dolls etc? And have more than one thrust of the pin. After doing it the first time there's a recovery and then...

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Posted in I Can Never Say Sorry…

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I mentioned Spike Milligan

Posted on Wed, 24 Jun 2020

I mentioned Spike Milligan the other day. And this reminds me of him too. 

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Posted in Tormentors' Just Desserts

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