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Drew Gummerson
Author of Me and Mickie James (Jonathan Cape) and The Lodger (GMP), and many stories here and there. Follow me at @drewgum. Seven Nights At The Flamingo Hotel is coming November 2020. Pre-order here https://www.beardedbadgerpublishing.com/online-store
It is beautiful. I didn't
Posted on Thu, 23 Jul 2020
It is beautiful. I didn't know what 'ouzel' meant. It's a lovely word.
Read full commentPosted in Love is a Labour
It's really good. I read it
Posted on Thu, 23 Jul 2020
It's really good. I read it before. I'd put the year in the first line. You're writing in the present tense and so I'd make it clear it's not now. In the first paragraph, if you have, 'you know' do you need a question mark after States? I think...
Read full commentPosted in From Jester To King (Opening - EDITED)
Yes, I thought that. As part
Posted on Mon, 13 Jul 2020
Yes, I thought that. As part of a longer piece it'd be fine. I was just thinking, stand alone, the opening is a bit long. Having posted longer work on here it made me really think, does this piece work alone? And that was really helpful. Because...
Read full commentPosted in The Careers Teacher
I think it's great from,
Posted on Mon, 13 Jul 2020
I think it's great from, 'Darren walked to the stairwell...'. The tone of it is different from there, completely in his head. I think you need a new first line. In my opinion, because it's a short story and everything has to count. Asking for...
Read full commentPosted in The Careers Teacher
It's a character. I see that.
Posted on Tue, 07 Jul 2020
It's a character. I see that. And it is how a lot of people talk. But we need to know why he's not let on the tube. 'After the incident with the French horn, the poodle and the can of WD40 Charlie gave me down the pub they wouldn't even let me...
Read full commentPosted in Not too Much to Ask
So sorry to hear that x
Posted on Sun, 07 Jun 2020
So sorry to hear that x
Read full commentPosted in Iriecat
Loved both it and the video.
Posted on Sun, 05 Jul 2020
Loved both it and the video. 'apologies of bees' is lovely.
Read full commentPosted in Bee eaters
Brilliant. Loved it. And what
Posted on Sun, 28 Jun 2020
Brilliant. Loved it. And what a great idea. National Insect Week.
Read full commentPosted in Bluebottle
As Celticman said, good story
Posted on Wed, 24 Jun 2020
As Celticman said, good story. I think you need to build up the voodoo element, introduce it more slowly. How did he know about voodoo dolls etc? And have more than one thrust of the pin. After doing it the first time there's a recovery and then...
Read full commentPosted in I Can Never Say Sorry…
I mentioned Spike Milligan
Posted on Wed, 24 Jun 2020
I mentioned Spike Milligan the other day. And this reminds me of him too.
Read full commentPosted in Tormentors' Just Desserts
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